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When ripped off in a car purchase a reckless guy seeks revenge, but must defend himself, his best friend and an attractive receptionist against a psychopathic car salesman.
Agreed with most of what Mrliteral says except the order of things best to start a logline with the inciting incident and have it closely imitate the experience if the plot once completed.
Agreed with most of what Mrliteral says except the order of things best to start a logline with the inciting incident and have it closely imitate the experience if the plot once completed.
See lessWhen the suicide of Trent Warner is discovered, a group of his friends must fulfill his dying wish by delivering 100 letters he composed before his suicide, in doing so they will discover that Trent Warner?s death is not as simple as the police report makes it out to be.
You specified that the main characters are the group of friends which means you have a multi protagonist plot. These type of scripts are hard to write and execute well on the page seeing as a single protagonist plot is a feat on its own. I think best to pick one character as the ring leader the headRead more
You specified that the main characters are the group of friends which means you have a multi protagonist plot. These type of scripts are hard to write and execute well on the page seeing as a single protagonist plot is a feat on its own. I think best to pick one character as the ring leader the head poncho and use that character as the main point of view character to tell the story with.
The motivation for the characters to deliver letters after their friend dies feels weak and more of a convenience. What is it that happens that, beyond a doubt and without much explanation, motivates someone to need to deliver a bunch of letters?
The circumstance of the friends death is not an obstacle it is a revelation that could motivate a mid act 2 change of approach but not oppose the characters from achieving their goals.
I think the concept needs re thinking here are some questions to consider.
What single character will drive the story and have it be about? What is that character’s clear and well motivated goal?
Unlike before use these questions as pointers to help with a re draft the logline answering them in a post will likely not be as productive.
Hope this helps.
See less"When an upper-class rebel is suddenly disinherited by his fed-up father, he struggles to win his father?s approval in order to have his inheritance restored, but his plans derail when he is forcibly drafted to fight in the second US civil war."
Agreed with the above. Also if the MC's inciting incident or in other words the event that motivates him to take action is being disinherited by his father how does that motivate him to achieve something in a war? The two appear disconnected in terms of cause and effect. Secondly what is his outer,Read more
Agreed with the above.
Also if the MC’s inciting incident or in other words the event that motivates him to take action is being disinherited by his father how does that motivate him to achieve something in a war?
The two appear disconnected in terms of cause and effect.
Secondly what is his outer, able to be filmed with a camera and objective goal? This is still unclear from the re draft and as a result it is unclear what the MC will be doing for most of the film.
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