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When a 17 year-old does a work for the dole program at a Sydney Car Wash for a businessman, he becomes entangled into his shady world while his dreams of wrestling at the 2000 Olympic Games becomes more and more distant by the year. Note: This is a TV pilot.
When structuring characters for a TV show best to start off with a logline for the pilot episode, if this was the intention I fail to see the plot of the pilot in the logline. You mention his ambition but not a specific inciting incident, goal and obstacle. What is it he needs to do in the pilot epiRead more
When structuring characters for a TV show best to start off with a logline for the pilot episode, if this was the intention I fail to see the plot of the pilot in the logline.
You mention his ambition but not a specific inciting incident, goal and obstacle.
What is it he needs to do in the pilot episode?
Why did he need to work in the car wash now? What exactly is it he wants to do? Compete in the try-outs for the olympic wrestling team? win a spot on the Olympic wrestling team? What is stopping him? Is it money? Skill level? Physical injury?
It’s through the answers to these questions that you can structure a logline for the pilot and infer the character dynamics that will make up most of the stories for the following seasons.
Hope this helps.
See lessIn order to coordinate an extra-terrestrial landing that is expected to occur in the Australian outback, the Australian Government enlists a controversial think-tank, who are now depending on the success of this event for their own livelihood, think 'Contact' meets 'The Games' TV show.
Agreed with FFF and DPG. Also what is the inciting incident what event starts the story and sets the MC off on their journey? Hope this helps.
Agreed with FFF and DPG.
Also what is the inciting incident what event starts the story and sets the MC off on their journey?
Hope this helps.
See lessWith only 24 hours before her life support machine is switched off, a coma patient is given a second chance when she is recruited by an organisation that operates within the human subconscious to help stop a terror group that controls people via their dreams.
The logline is too long as it uses descriptions too convoluted to be effective whilst keeping the inciting incident and goal vague and plot unclear. Bare bones: After a coma patient is recruited in her own mind by an agency that operates in the human psyche she must fight a russian coma patient to pRead more
The logline is too long as it uses descriptions too convoluted to be effective whilst keeping the inciting incident and goal vague and plot unclear.
Bare bones:
After a coma patient is recruited in her own mind by an agency that operates in the human psyche she must fight a russian coma patient to prevent a soviet mind control program.
Interesting theme as it deals with a scary question does the mind stay active in a coma?
But all I can think of is Inception?
How will this differ in practical terms?
Hope this helps.
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