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When a mass murder shuts down production on an Arctic oil rig, an ambitious young oil exec is charged with managing the crisis only to be thrust into a battle for survival as an ancient fungus co-opts the first responders turning them into violent spore spreading rapists.
This draft of the logline incorporates a new element with no benefit to the story. How is the mass murder connected to the ancient fungus? Is the MC fighting the mass murder, the fungus or the infected people? What does your MC want more than anything in the world? The mass murder element adds anothRead more
This draft of the logline incorporates a new element with no benefit to the story.
How is the mass murder connected to the ancient fungus? Is the MC fighting the mass murder, the fungus or the infected people? What does your MC want more than anything in the world?
The mass murder element adds another inciting incident to a separate plot in an already complicated logline that lacks a clear cause and effect relationship between its plot elements.
MC – oil executive
MC flaw – ?
Inciting incident – Mass killings? Fungus discovery?
MC inner goal – ?
MC outer goal – Stop the mass murder? Stop the fungus? Stop the infected people?
Outer goal obstacle – ?
Antagonist – Mass murderer? Fungus?
Main action taken by the MC – ?
If you could definitively answer the above question marks with a single answer (by this I mean for example: stop the mass murder not stop the mass murder and stop the fungus) we can then help you structure a cohesive logline for your main plot.
Hope this helps.
See lessWhen a mass murder shuts down production on an Arctic oil rig, an ambitious young oil exec is charged with managing the crisis only to be thrust into a battle for survival as an ancient fungus co-opts the first responders turning them into violent spore spreading rapists.
This draft of the logline incorporates a new element with no benefit to the story. How is the mass murder connected to the ancient fungus? Is the MC fighting the mass murder, the fungus or the infected people? What does your MC want more than anything in the world? The mass murder element adds anothRead more
This draft of the logline incorporates a new element with no benefit to the story.
How is the mass murder connected to the ancient fungus? Is the MC fighting the mass murder, the fungus or the infected people? What does your MC want more than anything in the world?
The mass murder element adds another inciting incident to a separate plot in an already complicated logline that lacks a clear cause and effect relationship between its plot elements.
MC – oil executive
MC flaw – ?
Inciting incident – Mass killings? Fungus discovery?
MC inner goal – ?
MC outer goal – Stop the mass murder? Stop the fungus? Stop the infected people?
Outer goal obstacle – ?
Antagonist – Mass murderer? Fungus?
Main action taken by the MC – ?
If you could definitively answer the above question marks with a single answer (by this I mean for example: stop the mass murder not stop the mass murder and stop the fungus) we can then help you structure a cohesive logline for your main plot.
Hope this helps.
See lessWhen a terminally ill scientist uploads his consciousness to a virtual world he believes he has cheated death, but when AI designed to care for him begins digitising others, he’ll risk everything he’s created, including his own virtual existence, to shut it down.
There are too many elements unrelated to the plot at hand present in the logline for it to be effective. Who is the story about? What exactly does he or she want? How will he or she achieve it? These questions are not being answered in the current draft of the log line and are crucial for a logline.Read more
There are too many elements unrelated to the plot at hand present in the logline for it to be effective.
Who is the story about?
What exactly does he or she want?
How will he or she achieve it?
These questions are not being answered in the current draft of the log line and are crucial for a logline.
That aside, the use of criminals in dangerous environments as desperadoes willing to risk their life in exchange for freedom is a trope common to many B grade scifi and horror movies. As such what makes these criminals inner journey unique what sets these characters apart from Arnie in Running Man or Gerard Butler in Gamer?
Hope this helps.
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