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Fed up with stiff regulations preventing people from getting the organs they need, Dr. Andrea Sellers dives into the seedy world of the underground organ trade. (1 hour cable drama)
As Richieve demonstrated better to make this a personal battle for the Dr than pure principle and it could add a ticking time bomb element to the story. As it reads now the logline lacks a dramatic premise due to there being no clear goal for the protagonist to achieve. If she has to save her own chRead more
As Richieve demonstrated better to make this a personal battle for the Dr than pure principle and it could add a ticking time bomb element to the story.
As it reads now the logline lacks a dramatic premise due to there being no clear goal for the protagonist to achieve. If she has to save her own child and has limited time to do so and has to fight the dregs of the underworld crime syndicates to get a life saving organ the stakes are high the goal is clear and the fight is noble.
Otherwise you’re diluting the empathy the audience will develop and the impact of the story as a whole.
Hope this helps.
See less"Dillon's brother, Seth, dies ten years earlier and Dillon goes back in time to become friends with him and save him." Copyright
Died not dies as it is past not present. Why did the MC decide to go back now and not a year ago or a week after the death? How does time travel link to the main plot of saving the brother? Consider Back to The Future, Marty time travels to back in time as a result of the danger Doc Brown puts himseRead more
Died not dies as it is past not present.
Why did the MC decide to go back now and not a year ago or a week after the death?
How does time travel link to the main plot of saving the brother?
Consider Back to The Future, Marty time travels to back in time as a result of the danger Doc Brown puts himself in. He then needs to time travel to the future to save Doc Brown. With out the initial danger there would be no inciting incident for the MC and no driving (pardon the pun) goal.
Hope this helps.
See less"Dillon's brother, Seth, dies ten years earlier and Dillon goes back in time to become friends with him and save him." Copyright
Died not dies as it is past not present. Why did the MC decide to go back now and not a year ago or a week after the death? How does time travel link to the main plot of saving the brother? Consider Back to The Future, Marty time travels to back in time as a result of the danger Doc Brown puts himseRead more
Died not dies as it is past not present.
Why did the MC decide to go back now and not a year ago or a week after the death?
How does time travel link to the main plot of saving the brother?
Consider Back to The Future, Marty time travels to back in time as a result of the danger Doc Brown puts himself in. He then needs to time travel to the future to save Doc Brown. With out the initial danger there would be no inciting incident for the MC and no driving (pardon the pun) goal.
Hope this helps.
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