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For 10 years this man has been having accurate visions of events seven days into the future. Last night he saw his own murder at the hands of a woman he doesn't know.
The story still starts from the point of him receiving the vision of his own death anything before that is backstory and opening image. How much screen time you want to spend on the events prior to the vision is up to you but normally no more than 10-15 pages. This means that they are not necessaryRead more
The story still starts from the point of him receiving the vision of his own death anything before that is backstory and opening image. How much screen time you want to spend on the events prior to the vision is up to you but normally no more than 10-15 pages. This means that they are not necessary (or could be done without in the log line).
If his death is now a certainty for him, the question is what is the dramatic dilemma? By this I mean what is he going to do and why is it so hard for him to do?
What is the MC’s choice to make between the lesser of two evils in order to achieve his goal?
Further more what is his goal? What action that he takes will constitute most of act 2?
See lessFor 10 years this man has been having accurate visions of events seven days into the future. Last night he saw his own murder at the hands of a woman he doesn't know.
The story still starts from the point of him receiving the vision of his own death anything before that is backstory and opening image. How much screen time you want to spend on the events prior to the vision is up to you but normally no more than 10-15 pages. This means that they are not necessaryRead more
The story still starts from the point of him receiving the vision of his own death anything before that is backstory and opening image. How much screen time you want to spend on the events prior to the vision is up to you but normally no more than 10-15 pages. This means that they are not necessary (or could be done without in the log line).
If his death is now a certainty for him, the question is what is the dramatic dilemma? By this I mean what is he going to do and why is it so hard for him to do?
What is the MC’s choice to make between the lesser of two evils in order to achieve his goal?
Further more what is his goal? What action that he takes will constitute most of act 2?
See lessFor 10 years this man has been having accurate visions of events seven days into the future. Last night he saw his own murder at the hands of a woman he doesn't know.
The hook about this is a man seeing his own murderer so I think perhaps best to start with that as an inciting incident. The first sentence in this logline feels redundant because the "...I see the future..., ...I see dead people..., ...I see murders..." super natural element is well established asRead more
The hook about this is a man seeing his own murderer so I think perhaps best to start with that as an inciting incident. The first sentence in this logline feels redundant because the “…I see the future…, …I see dead people…, …I see murders…” super natural element is well established as a trope in film and TV. Also the exact nature of the mechanism by which the man sees the future is unrelated to the plot at hand of him stopping the killer.
Here is my try:
After a clairvoyant is given a vision of his own murder he has a week to find and stop the killer.
Better to add in some character descriptions for the antagonist and MC but none are in the current draft of the logline and as the above example is very lean there is plenty of room to add words.
Hope this helps.
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