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An intergalactic space army called the star guardians are assigned to go up against the most dangerous army in the galaxy led by the charismatic and evil leader named Blade.
Agreed with DPG. I would go further and say that this log line sounds like any other war movie. Try removing the words Galaxy and space and you basically have the generic description of any war story ever told: An army called the British Army are assigned to go up against the most dangerous army ledRead more
Agreed with DPG.
I would go further and say that this log line sounds like any other war movie. Try removing the words Galaxy and space and you basically have the generic description of any war story ever told:
An army called the British Army are assigned to go up against the most dangerous army led by the charismatic and evil leader named Napoleon.
An army called the Allies are assigned to go up against the most dangerous army led by the charismatic and evil leader named Hitler.
Only as previously mentioned without a MC, personal stakes or specified goals.
I think that the over indulgence in VFX heavy films and recent rise of the comic book hero movies have created a far more savvy audience than 10 or 15 years ago. What this means is unless your space story is based on a commonly known space premise or character in space you need to work doubly hard to justify a space adventure.
Hope this helps.
See lessAn intergalactic space army called the star guardians are assigned to go up against the most dangerous army in the galaxy led by the charismatic and evil leader named Blade.
Agreed with DPG. I would go further and say that this log line sounds like any other war movie. Try removing the words Galaxy and space and you basically have the generic description of any war story ever told: An army called the British Army are assigned to go up against the most dangerous army ledRead more
Agreed with DPG.
I would go further and say that this log line sounds like any other war movie. Try removing the words Galaxy and space and you basically have the generic description of any war story ever told:
An army called the British Army are assigned to go up against the most dangerous army led by the charismatic and evil leader named Napoleon.
An army called the Allies are assigned to go up against the most dangerous army led by the charismatic and evil leader named Hitler.
Only as previously mentioned without a MC, personal stakes or specified goals.
I think that the over indulgence in VFX heavy films and recent rise of the comic book hero movies have created a far more savvy audience than 10 or 15 years ago. What this means is unless your space story is based on a commonly known space premise or character in space you need to work doubly hard to justify a space adventure.
Hope this helps.
See lessA young talented street musician is beginning a new life with his brother to realize the dream of a common band. But his childhood traumas and a flubbed school performance in the past preventing him to show his full talent on stage and driving him into the arms of a greedy music producer who has his own plans for the two brothers.
There are several problems with this logline formatting and length aside. What is at stake for the MC? Why must he start a band now? What starts off his action to start the band? Most importantly; What is the inciting incident? Starting the band is not an inciting incident as he would have started tRead more
There are several problems with this logline formatting and length aside.
What is at stake for the MC? Why must he start a band now? What starts off his action to start the band?
Most importantly; What is the inciting incident? Starting the band is not an inciting incident as he would have started the band with his brother regardless and ultimately starting the band was his choice not something done to him forcing him to take action.
Further the obstacles and backstory appear to be unrelated to each other. How can a “flubbed” school performance from years before drive anyone into the arms of some one? On that note what does drive into the arms of a producer mean? Romantically? Sexual? Legally? As a business arraignment?
The choice of words is confusing on top of the cause and effect relationship of the story elements.
Hope this helps.
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