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A teenage girl returns home to her whole family executed and must go undercover to find her family's killers where she finds that she isn't fully human.
Agreed with Gilgamesh. What genre is this story? What time period and location? The need for the girl to pursue the killers could be explained if the story was set in the old west or 17th century Prussia for example. But the combination of genres as a result of the directive and scifi elements in thRead more
Agreed with Gilgamesh.
What genre is this story?
What time period and location?
The need for the girl to pursue the killers could be explained if the story was set in the old west or 17th century Prussia for example.
But the combination of genres as a result of the directive and scifi elements in the logline could confuse readers.
Hope this helps.
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From your reply it sounds like the "...series of cryptic visions..." is the inciting incident not being recruited. The technical reason for this is her being recruited to lead a team didn't force her to change anything nor was it out of the ordinary presumably she would have been recruited regardlesRead more
From your reply it sounds like the “…series of cryptic visions…” is the inciting incident not being recruited. The technical reason for this is her being recruited to lead a team didn’t force her to change anything nor was it out of the ordinary presumably she would have been recruited regardless.
But as inciting incidents go a cryptic vision needs context to have the impact an inciting incident needs. A biblical character who sees a vision from a deity would change the course of their lives to pursue answers but a modern day scientist would likely see a psychiatrist. What in the vision was it that made her suddenly take such drastic action? How did the visions tie into a personal aspect of her life?
As for her goal wanting to be known for doing something will make it hard to establish a quantifiable measure for its success. As a result the goal is not visual the reader can’t envisage an obligatory scene. Can you re define her goal more specifically in a way that it could be shot by a camera?
Hope this helps.
See lessIn a secret facility, a headstrong computer scientist developing microchips implanted in the brains of test animals fears that she might be a subject in a similar experiment on humans.
From your reply it sounds like the "...series of cryptic visions..." is the inciting incident not being recruited. The technical reason for this is her being recruited to lead a team didn't force her to change anything nor was it out of the ordinary presumably she would have been recruited regardlesRead more
From your reply it sounds like the “…series of cryptic visions…” is the inciting incident not being recruited. The technical reason for this is her being recruited to lead a team didn’t force her to change anything nor was it out of the ordinary presumably she would have been recruited regardless.
But as inciting incidents go a cryptic vision needs context to have the impact an inciting incident needs. A biblical character who sees a vision from a deity would change the course of their lives to pursue answers but a modern day scientist would likely see a psychiatrist. What in the vision was it that made her suddenly take such drastic action? How did the visions tie into a personal aspect of her life?
As for her goal wanting to be known for doing something will make it hard to establish a quantifiable measure for its success. As a result the goal is not visual the reader can’t envisage an obligatory scene. Can you re define her goal more specifically in a way that it could be shot by a camera?
Hope this helps.
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