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A conversation with his younger backdoor neighbour forces a college student to reconsider his doubts.
Is a conversation really a powerful enough an event to set your character off on a journey? What is said in this conversation that was so immensely compelling that he would now have to take death defying (i.e interesting) action? Even if the conversation was gut wrenchingly, gobsmackingly enlighteniRead more
Is a conversation really a powerful enough an event to set your character off on a journey?
What is said in this conversation that was so immensely compelling that he would now have to take death defying (i.e interesting) action?
Even if the conversation was gut wrenchingly, gobsmackingly enlightening it is a chat with a neighbor not very cinematic for an inciting incident. Unless the neighbor was someone who can conceivably change someone via a chat such as, not that it is possible, but the next Dalai Lama or something along those lines.
How else except a conversation can you push your protagonist into taking action.
Hope this helps.
See lessA conversation with his younger backdoor neighbour forces a college student to reconsider his doubts.
Is a conversation really a powerful enough an event to set your character off on a journey? What is said in this conversation that was so immensely compelling that he would now have to take death defying (i.e interesting) action? Even if the conversation was gut wrenchingly, gobsmackingly enlighteniRead more
Is a conversation really a powerful enough an event to set your character off on a journey?
What is said in this conversation that was so immensely compelling that he would now have to take death defying (i.e interesting) action?
Even if the conversation was gut wrenchingly, gobsmackingly enlightening it is a chat with a neighbor not very cinematic for an inciting incident. Unless the neighbor was someone who can conceivably change someone via a chat such as, not that it is possible, but the next Dalai Lama or something along those lines.
How else except a conversation can you push your protagonist into taking action.
Hope this helps.
See lessRobbed of her childhood after a tragedy, a young woman struggles to get her life on track. After a passionate romance, she finally begins to see a future for herself, but her past makes her a danger to everyone she loves and she must learn to heal before her future is taken from her too.
If the bad thing happened to her in her childhood, why does she suddenly now struggle to get her life on track? Presumable there have been a few years between the bad thing happening and her being an adult. Or has she been struggling ever since the bad thing happened? If so then she isn't trying toRead more
If the bad thing happened to her in her childhood, why does she suddenly now struggle to get her life on track?
Presumable there have been a few years between the bad thing happening and her being an adult.
Or has she been struggling ever since the bad thing happened? If so then she isn’t trying to get her life back on track she is struggling for a normal life regardless what it was before.
In addition to DPG’s comments I think the logline is missing the crucial starting point for the MC. Without this it will be hard for the reader to see the character trajectory.
Hope this helps.
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