Sign Up Sign Up

Captcha Click on image to update the captcha.

Have an account? Sign In Now

Sign In Sign In

Forgot Password?

If you'd like access, Sign Up Here

Forgot Password Forgot Password

Lost your password? Please enter your email address. You will receive a link and will create a new password via email.

Captcha Click on image to update the captcha.

Have an account? Sign In Now

Sorry, you do not have permission to ask a question, You must login to ask a question.

Forgot Password?

To see everything, Sign Up Here

Sorry, you do not have permission to ask a question, You must login to ask a question.

Forgot Password?

To see everything, Sign Up Here

Please briefly explain why you feel this question should be reported.

Please briefly explain why you feel this answer should be reported.

Please briefly explain why you feel this user should be reported.

Logline It! Logo Logline It! Logo
Sign InSign Up

Logline It!

Logline It! Navigation

  • Sign Up
  • Logline Generator
  • Learn our simple Logline Formula
  • Search Loglines
Search
Post Your Logline

Mobile menu

Close
Post Your Logline
  • Signup
  • Sign Up
  • Logline Generator
  • Learn our simple Logline Formula
  • Search Loglines
  • About
  • Questions
  • Answers
  • Best Answers
  1. Posted: November 10, 2014In: Public

    When masked men enter his home, and his wife is tragically killed in the crossfire, Jack knows his life will never be the same again. His undercover cop career over, he is given a new identity under witness protection and shipped to the middle of nowhere. Battling his guilt he decides to go against his new protection to drew out the killers and gain revenge.

    Neer Shelter Singularity
    Added an answer on November 10, 2014 at 9:16 am

    Good advice above additionally I would say better to isolate exactly which event it is that makes him want to take action. In this instance the interesting action would be revenge so the better to choose his wife being killed over his cover being blown. How about: After his wife is killed by a crazeRead more

    Good advice above additionally I would say better to isolate exactly which event it is that makes him want to take action. In this instance the interesting action would be revenge so the better to choose his wife being killed over his cover being blown.

    How about:
    After his wife is killed by a crazed masked man during a home invasion a guilt ridden under cover cop goes after the killer.

    Hope this helps.

    See less
    • 0
    • Share
      Share
      • Share on Facebook
      • Share on Twitter
      • Share on LinkedIn
      • Share on WhatsApp
  2. Posted: November 10, 2014In: Public

    When masked men enter his home, and his wife is tragically killed in the crossfire, Jack knows his life will never be the same again. His undercover cop career over, he is given a new identity under witness protection and shipped to the middle of nowhere. Battling his guilt he decides to go against his new protection to drew out the killers and gain revenge.

    Neer Shelter Singularity
    Added an answer on November 10, 2014 at 9:16 am

    Good advice above additionally I would say better to isolate exactly which event it is that makes him want to take action. In this instance the interesting action would be revenge so the better to choose his wife being killed over his cover being blown. How about: After his wife is killed by a crazeRead more

    Good advice above additionally I would say better to isolate exactly which event it is that makes him want to take action. In this instance the interesting action would be revenge so the better to choose his wife being killed over his cover being blown.

    How about:
    After his wife is killed by a crazed masked man during a home invasion a guilt ridden under cover cop goes after the killer.

    Hope this helps.

    See less
    • 0
    • Share
      Share
      • Share on Facebook
      • Share on Twitter
      • Share on LinkedIn
      • Share on WhatsApp
  3. Posted: September 25, 2014In: Public

    finally a culmination of the book from the pagemaster, bullwinkle the moose, and chip foose have one hell of a time while the stop Dr. Evil from taking over the world once again.

    Neer Shelter Singularity
    Added an answer on November 8, 2014 at 9:21 am

    The logline seemed cryptic to me as well, if a reader needs to research the subject matter to understand the character and premise the logline is not achieving what it needs to achieve. I can assume that these are established characters in certain places and therefore the characters and premise woulRead more

    The logline seemed cryptic to me as well, if a reader needs to research the subject matter to understand the character and premise the logline is not achieving what it needs to achieve.

    I can assume that these are established characters in certain places and therefore the characters and premise would be clear to people who come from these areas.

    However if you want the logline to be clear to more readers, perhaps try describing the characters from the point of view of a person that is un aware of the characters origin and back story.

    In most loglines names are not used unless critical to the readers understanding, generic character descriptions that are accurate to the specific story at hand are more common.

    How would you describe the MC?

    The antagonist is obviously Dr Evil.

    How would you describe the MC goal? As in how will he or she stop Dr Evil?

    I think the answers to these questions will comprise most of the next draft of the logline.

    Hope this helps.

    See less
    • 0
    • Share
      Share
      • Share on Facebook
      • Share on Twitter
      • Share on LinkedIn
      • Share on WhatsApp
1 … 821 822 823 824 825 … 927

Sidebar

Stats

  • Loglines 8,000
  • Reviews 32,189
  • Best Reviews 629
  • Users 3,732

screenwriting courses

Adv 120x600

aalan

Explore

  • Signup

Footer

© 2022 Karel Segers. All Rights Reserved
With Love from Immersion Screenwriting.