I’m not sure how a “…lumberjack wannabe…” will behave in different situations its not a clear character description. There is need for a description that will inspire conflict in our minds when we read the MC’s goals.

As previously mentioned best to specify an external tangible goal for the MC to pursue and in the same token describe the main action the MC will take to achieve the goal. The internal journey goal was specified “… figures out what it means to be a man.” but this is too vague to give a clear understanding of the way in which the MC learns a lesson and will develop.

Hope this helps, Nir.