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When an out of work teacher is given a deadline by a loan shark, he contracts a hit-man on himself so his family can collect on his life insurance. However after he befriends the hit-man they decide to fake his death instead.
Good point about killing the loan shark defeating the antagonist in this case permanently eliminating the threat is the obligatory scene. Only reason I wanted them to fake the MCs death was to find a way out of the financial strife. Will keep working on it.
Good point about killing the loan shark defeating the antagonist in this case permanently eliminating the threat is the obligatory scene. Only reason I wanted them to fake the MCs death was to find a way out of the financial strife.
Will keep working on it.
See lessWhen a naively sentimental clown doctor is approached by an 8 year old cancer patient in the hospital a bond is made and he must find a way to make the boy smile and learn to not get attached himself.
Hi DPG I'm not sure what the first part of your comments above is about so I will try and answer to the best of my understanding and in a productive manner. The reason I have re posted a new draft of the logline is to get some constructive feedback on my work in progress. As I'm still structuring thRead more
Hi DPG I’m not sure what the first part of your comments above is about so I will try and answer to the best of my understanding and in a productive manner.
The reason I have re posted a new draft of the logline is to get some constructive feedback on my work in progress. As I’m still structuring this story and would like to get your opinions before finalizing a step out line and synopsis.
Which I think is the whole point of this great forum so lets keep it that way.
As for the logline at hand and the story it is for:
The MC is a clown doctor not a medical doctor these are two distinctly different professions as mentioned previously. Clown doctors are actors and comedians that work with sick children to keep them happy with a high morale during lengthy medical treatments.
Clown doctors are real and regularly face similar situations as the logline proposes. Here is a link to the organization in Australia that employes clown doctors:
http://www.humourfoundation.com.au/
The MC is depressed because of his son’s death and can’t perform his job. As a result he loses the job what is worse is the job was a noble one helping sick children who need help to stay happy, for him he is losing a child all over again.
The external goal is to make the sick children laugh and get his job back his internal journey’s goal is to accept his son’s death his flaw is denial. He can choose to either walk away or fight for his job and prove his worth by helping the children be happy but to do so he will have to accept his son’s death and learn to get over it.
Does this come across from latest draft logline above?
If so is this an interesting premise in your mind and a compelling dilemma?
Thanks for your feedback and help.
See lessNir.
When a naively sentimental clown doctor is approached by an 8 year old cancer patient in the hospital a bond is made and he must find a way to make the boy smile and learn to not get attached himself.
Hi DPG I'm not sure what the first part of your comments above is about so I will try and answer to the best of my understanding and in a productive manner. The reason I have re posted a new draft of the logline is to get some constructive feedback on my work in progress. As I'm still structuring thRead more
Hi DPG I’m not sure what the first part of your comments above is about so I will try and answer to the best of my understanding and in a productive manner.
The reason I have re posted a new draft of the logline is to get some constructive feedback on my work in progress. As I’m still structuring this story and would like to get your opinions before finalizing a step out line and synopsis.
Which I think is the whole point of this great forum so lets keep it that way.
As for the logline at hand and the story it is for:
The MC is a clown doctor not a medical doctor these are two distinctly different professions as mentioned previously. Clown doctors are actors and comedians that work with sick children to keep them happy with a high morale during lengthy medical treatments.
Clown doctors are real and regularly face similar situations as the logline proposes. Here is a link to the organization in Australia that employes clown doctors:
http://www.humourfoundation.com.au/
The MC is depressed because of his son’s death and can’t perform his job. As a result he loses the job what is worse is the job was a noble one helping sick children who need help to stay happy, for him he is losing a child all over again.
The external goal is to make the sick children laugh and get his job back his internal journey’s goal is to accept his son’s death his flaw is denial. He can choose to either walk away or fight for his job and prove his worth by helping the children be happy but to do so he will have to accept his son’s death and learn to get over it.
Does this come across from latest draft logline above?
If so is this an interesting premise in your mind and a compelling dilemma?
Thanks for your feedback and help.
See lessNir.