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A scientist made slave to a government UFO reverse engineering project must escape before the ones who created the craft come back to get what is theirs.
Maybe try making the discovery of the aliens immanent return the inciting incident. This would clarify the start of the story. Good suggestion about the rogue General strait away puts images from 'Doctor Strange Love' and 'Apocalypse Now' in my mind that really helps picture the added stakes.
Maybe try making the discovery of the aliens immanent return the inciting incident. This would clarify the start of the story.
Good suggestion about the rogue General strait away puts images from ‘Doctor Strange Love’ and ‘Apocalypse Now’ in my mind that really helps picture the added stakes.
See lessA scientist made slave to a government UFO reverse engineering project must escape before the ones who created the craft come back to get what is theirs.
Maybe try making the discovery of the aliens immanent return the inciting incident. This would clarify the start of the story. Good suggestion about the rogue General strait away puts images from 'Doctor Strange Love' and 'Apocalypse Now' in my mind that really helps picture the added stakes.
Maybe try making the discovery of the aliens immanent return the inciting incident. This would clarify the start of the story.
Good suggestion about the rogue General strait away puts images from ‘Doctor Strange Love’ and ‘Apocalypse Now’ in my mind that really helps picture the added stakes.
See lessThree rock music fans must overcome the isolation of personal soundscapes to find joy together.
Not sure what this logline is aimed at achieving, it sounds like your describing an audio visual technique on stage. where as a logline would typically be used to road test core plot points of a story. Perhaps try thinking of the play in terms of the dramatic device that is currently preventing theRead more
Not sure what this logline is aimed at achieving, it sounds like your describing an audio visual technique on stage. where as a logline would typically be used to road test core plot points of a story.
Perhaps try thinking of the play in terms of the dramatic device that is currently preventing the 3 characters from finding joy. Then call the 3 characters the protagonists (a multi protagonist plot) and the dramatic device the obstacle. From this you could perhaps figure out the action the protagonists need to do to achieve their goal joy.
To help you wold perhaps need to answer these kind of questions for your self – Why cover up their ears? why uncover their ears? What is motivating them to play music and why are they in isolation in the first place? etc…
Hope this helps.
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