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Paranoid Harry, a shell-shocked lieutenant, is sent to stop a general gone mad, commanding a nuclear missile silo, before he starts world war 3.
Thanks for that reckon your right I am struggling with the wording on this one. Not sure how to phrase it in a logline to sum up the story. Genre - thriller will be mixed with lots of dry humor. Any thoughts would be most welcome. Act 1: Harry a returned lieutenant is given a low stress assignment iRead more
Thanks for that reckon your right I am struggling with the wording on this one.
Not sure how to phrase it in a logline to sum up the story.
Genre – thriller will be mixed with lots of dry humor. Any thoughts would be most welcome.
Act 1:
Harry a returned lieutenant is given a low stress assignment in a remote sleepy outback town under General Thomas A Brinker in a nuclear missile silo scheduled for disarmament.
Inciting incident:
Brinker initiates general lock-down and emergency procedures.
Act 2:
Harry manages to contact HQ but is not taken seriously due to his known sever paranoia.
Harry can’t stop the General. His starting a launch sequence confirms for HQ what Harry claimed.
Act 3:
Harry must delay the launch sequence from finalizing to allow an airstrike time to destroy the silo.
He overcomes his paranoia, prevents nuclear war and dies in the airstrike.
Very similar to “Dr Strangelove” in premise and in an end game scenario to “War game” and even “Spies Like Us” to a degree. But this story is of Harry’s journey inner – to overcome his psychological problems whilst outer – to save the world!
Thanks for the help.
See lessA vampire and vampire slayer living as roommates, hiding their identity, are secretly trying to kill each other, but fall in love in the process.
Bit confusing as there seam to be 2 posts for the same idea I'll respond to this one. Firstly when dealing with a romantic vampire movie it must be clearly positioned relative to the numerous romantic vampire movies out already, the shear number of which justify a dedicated genre. This lacks an "angRead more
Bit confusing as there seam to be 2 posts for the same idea I’ll respond to this one.
Firstly when dealing with a romantic vampire movie it must be clearly positioned relative to the numerous romantic vampire movies out already, the shear number of which justify a dedicated genre. This lacks an “angle” or direction for the film by which it will stand out from or fit into the vampire “genre” landscape. Buffy action comedy, Twilight teen sop or Dark Shadow neo realistic farce comedy, etc…
As for the story in the logline it comes across as missing a main character or MC as Karel writes. More like a dual protagonist which is much harder to write as it means they should both share the same journey throughout the story. If this is the case the Logline should reflect it as such which means they both need the same antagonist and obstacles to over come.
But for this you must first decide whether this is a love story, an education plot, a redemption plot etc.
Hope this helps Nir.
See lessWhen a highly driven female FBI agent arrests a charismatic con man with near psychic perception, he offers to help her catch a notorious and most wanted serial killer, before he can strike again.
Could be a good premise for a thriller but doesn't come across through the logline. All the above comments are valid perhaps boil the logline down to the bare essential story elements of; hero, goal antagonist. Then find a way to describe the killer and FBI agent as the best possible antagonist andRead more
Could be a good premise for a thriller but doesn’t come across through the logline.
See lessAll the above comments are valid perhaps boil the logline down to the bare essential story elements of; hero, goal antagonist.
Then find a way to describe the killer and FBI agent as the best possible antagonist and hero combo (which means worst from the hero’s POV) i.e. highest chance of conflict with the hero.
Conflict = interest.