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Egotistical 90's band manager Steve Gold attempts to reform the modestly successfull boyband Xcite.
Agreed with Paul would like to add that would be good to know what is standing in his way from reforming the band. By this I mean what is he going to struggle against to get them back together again.
Agreed with Paul would like to add that would be good to know what is standing in his way from reforming the band. By this I mean what is he going to struggle against to get them back together again.
See lessAfter losing his life-savings to a malpractice suit, a small town physician takes money from a crime syndicate in order to provide illegal care, unaware of how deeply he will be involved with the murderous gang.
Sounds like a potentially interesting story reminiscent of Breaking Bad in that an upstanding highly educated man is forced to deal with criminals. Holds the potential for great character contrasts and interesting comic situations such as in "Analyse This". But as the logline goes it needs economy iRead more
Sounds like a potentially interesting story reminiscent of Breaking Bad in that an upstanding highly educated man is forced to deal with criminals. Holds the potential for great character contrasts and interesting comic situations such as in “Analyse This”.
But as the logline goes it needs economy in words and more potency of adjectives. Perhaps: A small town physician is forced to borrow money from the mob in turn for his services on hand at any time.
Not forgetting motivation and a goal not clear in the logline either. Maybe he wants to break the contract but the mob won’t allow it as far as they are concerned he is in for life.
Hope this helps.
See lessEd Noble?s world falls apart when a suicide bomber murders his family. Holding the bomber?s spiritual leader responsible, Ed resorts to desperate measures to bring him to account.
Aside from the tender subject of PCness. This is clearly a revenge story, which is a good place to start as you can easily research the genre. But the logline doesn't stipulate what the main action of the story will be. It has an MC and an II but no goal, obstacle or clear antagonist. From your storRead more
Aside from the tender subject of PCness.
This is clearly a revenge story, which is a good place to start as you can easily research the genre.
But the logline doesn’t stipulate what the main action of the story will be. It has an MC and an II but no goal, obstacle or clear antagonist.
From your story description it also seams as if Ed needs to develop internally as a character to facilitate his overcoming the trauma but this isn’t made clear. Also I find that “attempts to confront” are normally quite boring for story purposes best to cut strait to the first act of revenge.
May be a good idea to start with clearly defining Ed’s antagonist is it the: police trying to stop the siege, the media exposing Ed or the spiritual leader?
Hope this helps.
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