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A preacher?s wife, grieving from the loss of her teenage son and struggling to hold her family together, forms an unlikely friendship with a young street hustler who helps her understand her lost son and survive alcoholic depression.
Introducing the character as a preacher's wife muddies who the focus of the story is on; your protagonist doesn't currently have an identity beyond being the wife of another character in the story. Also, meeting the hustler seems like the event or inciting incident. Once she has met him/her ... whatRead more
Introducing the character as a preacher’s wife muddies who the focus of the story is on; your protagonist doesn’t currently have an identity beyond being the wife of another character in the story.
See lessAlso, meeting the hustler seems like the event or inciting incident. Once she has met him/her … what is the clear outer goal that the majority of the story will focus on?
A female prison guard in the future, where prisoners are rehabilitated with virtual reality, discovers a conspiracy that puts her loyalty into question.
Agree with the pointers above, but also - how does the idea of virtual reality rehabilitation for criminals tie in at all with the conspiracy that will test your protagonist's loyalty? The ideas are too separate at the moment.
Agree with the pointers above, but also – how does the idea of virtual reality rehabilitation for criminals tie in at all with the conspiracy that will test your protagonist’s loyalty? The ideas are too separate at the moment.
See less1095. Godfrey of Bouillon has been assigned by the pope to do the greatest task of his life.. Lead the Crusade to Jerusalum. 1097. Godfrey leads his men on a march from Costantinople (istanbul) to Nicaea. Godfrey attacks the City to the east while the other armies attack the south. Bouillon leaves Nicaea. Bouillons and Raymounds forces then advanced to Dorylaeum. Raymound army goes to camp but are attacked by turkish soldier. His army is slaughtered. Midday Godfrey sends 50 knights to rienforce Bohemund. The Battle continues until the turkish knights retreated. 1099. 2100 of the Crusaders went to fight the Mighty 20,000 turkish soldiers
dpg's on it - for this entry and your other one. Take a squiz at the section of the site called "Write It" for some pointers.
dpg’s on it – for this entry and your other one. Take a squiz at the section of the site called “Write It” for some pointers.
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