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After his son is mutilated by a legendary creature, a father must stop future deaths from happening only to learn that he has become the supernatural animan’s next target.
It's not real clear to me how his son's mutilation becomes the motivation for the father to stop future deaths? Once the mutilation has happened, isn't that sort of the end of his need to be involved? Take something like Jaws, for example, where the first attack is KIND OF under his responsibility aRead more
It’s not real clear to me how his son’s mutilation becomes the motivation for the father to stop future deaths? Once the mutilation has happened, isn’t that sort of the end of his need to be involved? Take something like Jaws, for example, where the first attack is KIND OF under his responsibility as Sheriff, but when his son becomes a target the stakes are raised. What you’re proposing is to switch that — have the first attack be his son … but then what is the primal motivating force for him to them take any action at all?
See lessAlso, if he is the target of the next creature, the action he takes in during the second act should be to survive, right? Not stop other deaths? I guess what I’m getting at is that there’s not a clear causal relationship between the elements in this story.
Could you just say “monster” to save on the word count of “legendary creature” and “supernatural animal”?
“After a his son is mutilated, a father must escape an ancient monster or suffer the same fate.” I guess that would suggest more of a cause and effect relationship, BUT makes the father look rather callous — kind of like he’s abandoning his injured son.
This is Jess. She IS a waitress. She is having an existential crisis, and the customers are NOT helping.
What has caused the existential crisis? What action does she take as a response? Don't tell me the character's name (especially as it is in the title). You're going for economy here with your words, so don't waste them on the name when it means nothing to anyone (unless you're writing the next HarryRead more
What has caused the existential crisis? What action does she take as a response?
Don’t tell me the character’s name (especially as it is in the title). You’re going for economy here with your words, so don’t waste them on the name when it means nothing to anyone (unless you’re writing the next Harry Potter). Instead, tell me the protagonist’s flaw and function. (A depressed waitress).
Can you create a customer who becomes the ‘ringleader’ — your central antagonist?
See lessTwenty years after the horrific slaying of a family, terrified townsfolk wait in fear for the imminent return of the menacing monster that was put away for the crime.
Needs a protagonist with a personal stake in stopping or escaping the monster.
Needs a protagonist with a personal stake in stopping or escaping the monster.
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