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After having lost her family to a cold killer, a girl plans her smart, twisted revenge
^ Richiev nails it. Your protagonist's compelling action - to plan - isn't very compelling.
^ Richiev nails it. Your protagonist’s compelling action – to plan – isn’t very compelling.
See lessAfter having lost her family to a cold killer, a girl plans her smart, twisted revenge
^ Richiev nails it. Your protagonist's compelling action - to plan - isn't very compelling.
^ Richiev nails it. Your protagonist’s compelling action – to plan – isn’t very compelling.
See less"A young girl disappears from her home and a body is found days later. When one of her friends receives a letter from her supposedly dead friend, events start to get twisted.."
FIrst off, your protagonist is identified only as "friend" ... which is about as compelling as a wet rag. What is their flaw, and what is their function - and in what ways do those two things make them both the LEAST LIKELY to be able to solve this mystery, and also UNLIKE any character we've encounRead more
FIrst off, your protagonist is identified only as “friend” … which is about as compelling as a wet rag. What is their flaw, and what is their function – and in what ways do those two things make them both the LEAST LIKELY to be able to solve this mystery, and also UNLIKE any character we’ve encountered before?
You’ve also only described an event – no compelling action. You get vague in the second half there.
“After she receives a letter claiming to be from a recently-deceased friend, a scatter-brained librarian …” does what?
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