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  1. Posted: September 24, 2013In: Public

    A teacher relives the last days of other people’s lives again and again after inadvertently making a deal with a stranger that hears him say ” I wish I lived someone else’s life, even for just a few days”. He dies a little with each death too, so has to break out of the deal to get back to his own family for good before he dies too.

    Nicholas Andrew Halls Samurai
    Added an answer on September 26, 2013 at 4:46 pm

    After being cursed to live out the final agonising days of strangers' lives, a reckless teacher must (WHAT IS THE OBJECTIVE GOAL THAT WOULD ALLOW HIM TO BREAK THE LOOP?) or be trapped in the cycle forever. To be honest, I'm usually a huge proponent of including the stakes clearly in your logline (thRead more

    After being cursed to live out the final agonising days of strangers’ lives, a reckless teacher must (WHAT IS THE OBJECTIVE GOAL THAT WOULD ALLOW HIM TO BREAK THE LOOP?) or be trapped in the cycle forever.

    To be honest, I’m usually a huge proponent of including the stakes clearly in your logline (that is, he is also slowly dying with each stranger’s death), but I think it’s unnecessary here because a) it blows out your word count, b) the eternity loop seems awful enough, c) I imagine it’s the kind of thing he finds out at the midpoint of the story, and while it ups the stakes for the second half of the film, making everything more urgent, it doesn’t feel necessary for someone planning to invest in or see your movie to know, in order to get an idea of what your film entails.

    You DEFINITELY need to figure out what specifically your protagonist has to do in order to break the loop, though. To think of it as a curse is useful – like how the Beast had to find true love before x to break it, or else how in Groundhog Day he had to learn how to live the day correctly to escape it. Once you’ve got that, include it in the logline.

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  2. Posted: September 25, 2013In: Public

    When an author encounters the characters he writes in the real world, creating a number of awkward and humorous moments, he must help them assimilate or return to the stories they belong in.

    Nicholas Andrew Halls Samurai
    Added an answer on September 26, 2013 at 4:39 pm

    Why? What does it matter if the characters he creates come into the real world? This logline has no stakes.

    Why? What does it matter if the characters he creates come into the real world? This logline has no stakes.

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  3. Posted: September 25, 2013In: Public

    When a hitman, who talks in his sleep, confesses to multiple murders to a hooker with a big mouth, the people who hired him and the police are out to catch him.

    Nicholas Andrew Halls Samurai
    Added an answer on September 26, 2013 at 4:38 pm

    I agree with the above; the premise is sound, it just feels like it needs some cleaning and polishing as far as the logline goes. And in as far as "evading" the bad guys ... how will we know that he has succeeded or failed? Must he make it to the plane waiting two states away? Must he kill the mob bRead more

    I agree with the above; the premise is sound, it just feels like it needs some cleaning and polishing as far as the logline goes. And in as far as “evading” the bad guys … how will we know that he has succeeded or failed? Must he make it to the plane waiting two states away? Must he kill the mob boss before he himself is killed? Don’t be vague with something like “evade” … tell me what his objective goal is, that REPRESENTS his evasion and survival.

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