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When a frustrated screen writer loses his voice, he must learn to write his way to mental freedom, but when a over opinionated logliner steals his idea he has only 200 hours before his spec is sold, and must submit his script and save his soul.
A character writing something as their major action is not a very cinematic or visual thing to do. Maybe this could work as a book? You've included two catalysts; losing his voice (I take this to mean a literally silencing of the character, as opposed to him losing his unique voice as a writer) andRead more
A character writing something as their major action is not a very cinematic or visual thing to do. Maybe this could work as a book?
You’ve included two catalysts; losing his voice (I take this to mean a literally silencing of the character, as opposed to him losing his unique voice as a writer) and someone stealing his idea. I think someone stealing his idea is more compelling, but whichever you’re more keen on, whittle it down to just the single “event” that sets your story into motion.
What does “write his way to mental freedom” look like? If I was the producer trying to decide whether to buy your script or not, would I be looking at some soaring epic or a single actor in a single room?
How does the script submission save his soul? Is there some sort of link between finishing and selling this script and him receiving his voice back?
Why 200 hours? What happens then?
See lessWhen a 13th century timewarp swallows a disillusioned mathamatician in the middle of his calculus exam, he is stranded by time, with 20 minutes left to finish the test he must calculate the years and circumnavigate fate in his final answer.
As stated above; your time clock doesn't work if the character has the ability to travel through time (Bill and Ted got away with it because their concept of time travel was goofy as hell. Back To The Future used the ability to come back at an earlier point in time as a plot point). Aside from the aRead more
As stated above; your time clock doesn’t work if the character has the ability to travel through time (Bill and Ted got away with it because their concept of time travel was goofy as hell. Back To The Future used the ability to come back at an earlier point in time as a plot point).
Aside from the above telling us that a mathematician is transported back to the 13th century, we have no idea what, once there, the objective goal is, how it is linked to travelling back in time, who is trying to stop your protagonist from achieving that goal, or what the stakes of failure may be.
See lessWWIII's survivors have been forced to go deep underground to reboot society. With resources running out and totalitarian rule building great discontent, our Rogue Group of government agents are tasked to explore the Earth's surface to determine if it is life-sustaining. What they find up above is far more frightening than anything they could have imagined.
Interesting, no doubt. The biggest problem (aside from word count) happening in the logline above is that you've described the scenario, but you haven't made mention of a flawed protagonist. It's so crucial - even in a film with a team going on an adventure - that there is someone that the audienceRead more
Interesting, no doubt.
The biggest problem (aside from word count) happening in the logline above is that you’ve described the scenario, but you haven’t made mention of a flawed protagonist. It’s so crucial – even in a film with a team going on an adventure – that there is someone that the audience can connect with, and journeys with. (Frodo in The Lord of the Rings, Luke Skywalker in Star Wars). And the goal; the reason they go to the surface, and what they’re looking for specifically, must be your protagonist’s goal specifically.
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