1. Posted: January 4, 2018In:

    To counter a growing malevolence, a young woman in 16th century England, must embrace both her growing powers and her destiny to change the course of history.

    Karel Segers Samurai

    2 x 'growing' doesn't sound good in a single sentence. Craig is right: too many questions. Also, the 'growing malevolence' is not enough of an inciting incident. The catalyst of a story can never be something gradual. It must be sudden.

    2 x ‘growing’ doesn’t sound good in a single sentence.

    Craig is right: too many questions.

    Also, the ‘growing malevolence’ is not enough of an inciting incident. The catalyst of a story can never be something gradual. It must be sudden.

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  2. Posted: January 4, 2018In:

    Upon learning that the bank contains entire life savings of his village elders, a stooge decides to change his ways in the middle of a robbery only to realize it’s not gonna be easy.

    Karel Segers Samurai

    Hey Variable, please make sure you post the logline in the right field. I fixed it this time. You had the title in the logline field, and vice versa. :)

    Hey Variable, please make sure you post the logline in the right field.

    I fixed it this time. You had the title in the logline field, and vice versa. 🙂

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  3. Posted: January 4, 2018In:

    just a thought..

    Karel Segers Samurai

    Great idea! In fact, we've been working on this, but it requires time/money, and the site is not generating the funds for this right now. If there's anyone out there willing to help out, please let us know! Thank you for the kind words. :)

    Great idea! In fact, we’ve been working on this, but it requires time/money, and the site is not generating the funds for this right now. If there’s anyone out there willing to help out, please let us know!

    Thank you for the kind words. 🙂

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