1. Posted: November 13, 2012In:

    A brilliant, genetically engineered con-artist has three days to find the scientist who programmed her to die on her twenty first birthday.

    patrockd

    Actually if I lose the 21st birthday idea, it does make the logline a lot simpler: A bio-engineered con-artist has three days to find her maker before she self destructs. Hmm... I'll keep tweaking...thanks for the input everyone!

    Actually if I lose the 21st birthday idea, it does make the logline a lot simpler:

    A bio-engineered con-artist has three days to find her maker before she self destructs.

    Hmm… I’ll keep tweaking…thanks for the input everyone!

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  2. Posted: November 13, 2012In:

    A brilliant, genetically engineered con-artist has three days to find the scientist who programmed her to die on her twenty first birthday.

    patrockd

    Good point!

    Good point!

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  3. Posted: November 13, 2012In:

    A brilliant, genetically engineered con-artist has three days to find the scientist who programmed her to die on her twenty first birthday.

    patrockd

    Thanks for your feedback! I agree it feels a bit crammed, and I really like term bio-genetic android! Something to consider, although I don't see her as an android, just genetically modified - tweaked like genetically modified food. She's intentionally designed to con, to be beautiful, confident, maRead more

    Thanks for your feedback! I agree it feels a bit crammed, and I really like term bio-genetic android! Something to consider, although I don’t see her as an android, just genetically modified – tweaked like genetically modified food. She’s intentionally designed to con, to be beautiful, confident, manipulative, eloquent and to die early – for a reason – which she will discover.

    I’m a bit unsure about “before she is terminated”. It’s concise, but it doesn’t suggest she’s programmed to die – it could mean they’re gonna put a bullet in her head.

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