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A schizophrenic young woman lives in constant suspicion of her life being surveilled and manipulated. A seemingly endless witch hunt for the truth takes place as she can’t seem to trust anyone.
"When the police don't believe someone is out to get her, a schizophrenic woman is determined to discover who or what is hiding inside her old Victorian home."
“When the police don’t believe someone is out to get her, a schizophrenic woman is determined to discover who or what is hiding inside her old Victorian home.”
See lessA schizophrenic young woman lives in constant suspicion of her life being surveilled and manipulated. A seemingly endless witch hunt for the truth takes place as she can’t seem to trust anyone.
What you have described is a situation What is the lead character's goal and who or what is standing in her way
What you have described is a situation
What is the lead character’s goal
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When a disillusioned married woman is absorbed by a surrealist painting, she struggles to develop the power to free herself from the painting before becoming part of it, while falling in love with a man of painting.
Is there a bigger story than what you are presenting in your logline? Because as written, the inciting incident is way bigger than the goal. Inciting incident: The lead character's girlfriend?gets trapped in a painting Goal: lead must 'find a guy' How I picture the story going after reading the loglRead more
Is there a bigger story than what you are presenting in your logline?
Because as written, the inciting incident is way bigger than the goal.
Inciting incident: The lead character’s girlfriend?gets trapped in a painting
Goal: lead must ‘find a guy’
How I picture the story going after reading the logline:
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“Excuse me, are you the painter, no?”
“Excuse me, do you know where the painter is?”
“I think I saw him on the second floor”
“Cool, thanks”
“Excuse me are you the painter? You are! Great, could you help me?
“My girlfriend seems to have gotten trapped in one of your paintings, could you get her out for me before you leave the exhibit? You will? That would be great, thanks.”
Boyfriend patiently waits at the bar while the painter gets his girlfriend out of the painting.
The End
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I’m assuming there is more to the lead character’s goal than just finding a guy? If so, I would try adding what he must do to save his girlfriend, because it will greatly improve your logline.
Good luck, the set up sounds interesting.
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