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The Lord living under an alias tries to reconcile with his estranged daughter who is a member of SWAT, but kills to police officers in self defense and not only finds himself at war with a brutal police force, but his daughter and now the salvation of humanity hangs in the balance.
To further the Superman analogy I used in your last logline attempt:---Let's say Jimmy Olsen and Clark Kent get into a dispute at work.? Jimmy Olson discovers that his lunch is missing from the break room. This has happened before and now Jimmy is angry. Someone is eating his lunch which he clearlyRead more
To further the Superman analogy I used in your last logline attempt:
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Let’s say Jimmy Olsen and Clark Kent get into a dispute at work.? Jimmy Olson discovers that his lunch is missing from the break room. This has happened before and now Jimmy is angry. Someone is eating his lunch which he clearly marked.
Jimmy is sure that Clark Kent is the culprit and confronts him. The two argue?loudly but the dispute is not resolved,
The next day Jimmy retaliates by putting a bunch of salt in Clark Kent’s lunch. Clark can’t prove Jimmy did it but he knows it was him.
The situation escalates, as both men retaliate against one other with petty revenge tactics, soon the entire paper gets caught up taking sides in the dispute.
Finally, Perry White calls them in the office to mediate, when he can’t resolve the issue, he ends up firing Jimmy Olsen because it is clear both men can’t work together.
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Here is the problem, Nothing about this plotline is necessary?for “Superman” to be the lead character; the lead character could be Joe Schmo with no superpowers and the story could have the exact same plotline. It might make for an interesting ‘B’ storyline but if you are going to write about Superman it should be about him saving the world from an evil Super Villian.
Why is Jesus necessary for your story? What is it about your story that it has to be Jesus instead of just an ordinary man who has an estranged?daughter and gets into a fight with the police?
Because that one extra thing which makes your script need to have Jesus as your lead character will be your hook; and the hook should be in your logline.? So I would add why the lead character must be Jesus and not Joe Schmo, and in doing so, it will greatly improve your logline.
See lessJesus Christ living under an alias is brutalized by two police officers and decides to fight back bringing him face to face with his estranged daughter a sergeant in SWAT. Their confrontation will decide whether humanity lives or dies.
What is the goal of your lead character?In the Bible,?the goal of Jesus was the salvation of all human beings. Thus he allowed himself to be arrested, beaten and die on the cross.In your story, he does the opposite. He fights back? Why? What is his motivation? What Jesus trying to accomplish?In secuRead more
What is the goal of your lead character?
In the Bible,?the goal of Jesus was the salvation of all human beings. Thus he allowed himself to be arrested, beaten and die on the cross.
In your story, he does the opposite. He fights back? Why? What is his motivation? What Jesus trying to accomplish?
In secular terms, let’s say you wrote a script about Superman, who in previous cannon?fought for truth, justice, and the American way… now in your script, Superman joins Isis and begins fighting against America. That is fine, however, the “Why is he doing this?” question will be asked. Why is Superman acting out of character?? What is the event that makes Superman go from fighting for justice to fighting for terror? What is he trying to accomplish?
In other words, having Jesus as your main character and even having him act out of character is fine, but there should be a strong motivation, more than just a spur of the moment decision to change who he is.
See lessWhen a misguided and socially frustrated young Muslim is manipulated online by a violent female imposter this nerve-shredding urban drama constructs a series of events that entwines the stringent crimes of some of modern societies most deviant personalities.
Here would be an example of a logline told from the point of view of the lead character: Your logline would probably be different because I am not sure of the exact plot details of your story. ----------------------------------------------- "When he's bullied online, a misguided Muslim seeks to discRead more
Here would be an example of a logline told from the point of view of the lead character: Your logline would probably be different because I am not sure of the exact plot details of your story.
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“When he’s bullied online, a misguided Muslim seeks to discover the identity of the female imposter harassing him, in order to get revenge.”