1. Posted: July 18, 2014In:

    After a womanising snowboarder tricks a vengeful witch into sleeping with him by making outlandish promises, she curses him and the only cure is to fulfill every one of his deceptive vows.

    Richiev Singularity

    There may be a few un-needed lines. How about this, I'm not changing anything, I'm just getting rid of a few extra words. ----- "After a chauvinist snowboarder tricks a vengeful witch into sleeping with him, she curses him and the only cure is for him to fulfill all promises." ----- Hope that helpedRead more

    There may be a few un-needed lines. How about this, I’m not changing anything, I’m just getting rid of a few extra words.
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    “After a chauvinist snowboarder tricks a vengeful witch into sleeping with him, she curses him and the only cure is for him to fulfill all promises.”
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    Hope that helped, good luck with this!

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  2. Posted: January 30, 2014In:

    "For reliable Riley Duncan, the weeks between spring break and prom prove that the lessons of love and life learned on the back of pickup truck, a dumpster dive, and from one strange Echo will become the events he?ll retell for a lifetime."

    Richiev Singularity

    My first question is, why now? What event sends him on the quest for love?

    My first question is, why now? What event sends him on the quest for love?

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  3. Posted: January 31, 2014In:

    "After a struggling writer’s sister is kidnapped by deranged script writer, he’s given 24 hours to create the perfect logline for the maniacs new screenplay, or his sister dies!"

    Richiev Singularity

    Great feedback Valentin! For Tag line 4 you could add: Life's a pitch... then you die!

    Great feedback Valentin!

    For Tag line 4 you could add: Life’s a pitch… then you die!

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