1. Posted: December 9, 2019In:

    When a demonic book is brought into a college couple home, the couple must find the source of there internal struggles before they become its next victim.

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    Richiev Singularity

    I am not sure how the two ideas presented in your logline connect, How does solving relationship problems stop a demon-possessed book? There doesn't seem to be any hint in your logline on how those two things connect. As an example, If there is a magic ring that is the power base for an evil sorcereRead more

    I am not sure how the two ideas presented in your logline connect, How does solving relationship problems stop a demon-possessed book? There doesn’t seem to be any hint in your logline on how those two things connect.

    As an example, If there is a magic ring that is the power base for an evil sorcerer, I understand how throwing the ring in a volcano would be a valid goal, because the volcano would melt the ring and destroy the power base. And by that same logic, if you said the couple must throw the evil book into a volcano I would understand how that would stop the book.

    But if the couple resolved their relationship problems wouldn’t the evil demon-possessed book still be a problem? How does the couple solving their relationship problems destroy the book?

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  2. Posted: December 9, 2019In:

    Six unknowingly linked and naive characters in, Edinburgh and London, struggle to find love in their stormy relationships before it is too late.

    Richiev Singularity

    This logline seems to be written from the outside looking in, instead of from the characters point of view. As a result, the logline comes across impersonal and as Karel said, the logline doesn't sell (The Story)  

    This logline seems to be written from the outside looking in, instead of from the characters point of view.

    As a result, the logline comes across impersonal and as Karel said, the logline doesn’t sell (The Story)

     

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  3. Posted: December 2, 2019In:

    When an explorer’s ancient necklace is stolen, she must retrieve it before it is used for evil.

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    Richiev Singularity

    Your logline is short enough you could add a few details to flesh out the story in the reader's mind:   When her ancient necklace (That can control the weather) is stolen by an evil (Witchdoctor) an intrepid explorer with a knack for trouble must get the artifact back, before it's used to (wreaRead more

    Your logline is short enough you could add a few details to flesh out the story in the reader’s mind:

     

    When her ancient necklace (That can control the weather) is stolen by an evil (Witchdoctor) an intrepid explorer with a knack for trouble must get the artifact back, before it’s used to (wreak havoc on the world)

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