1. Posted: November 8, 2019In:

    When sinister agents abduct him and his mother, an exceptionally gifted but socially isolated Indian teen discovers that he was genetically engineered for a dark purpose and must choose to either embrace that purpose or fight back on behalf of humanity.

    Richiev Singularity

    1: What purpose? Since this seems to be what sets up the entire story, you should tell us what his dark purpose is supposed to be. 2: It seems like the goal should be to escape or to defeat the sinister agents. After all they did abduct him and his mother. So the logical idea would be to escape, notRead more

    1: What purpose? Since this seems to be what sets up the entire story, you should tell us what his dark purpose is supposed to be.

    2: It seems like the goal should be to escape or to defeat the sinister agents. After all they did abduct him and his mother. So the logical idea would be to escape, not to choose whether to embrace his dark fate.

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  2. Posted: November 7, 2019In:

    Explorers: (1 HR) After Earth gets wiped out by a plague, lone survivors are living in a skyscraper. ?On the bottom floor, a thief must lead a team to stop a mass execution and along the way is caught up in a conspiracy that could cost him and everyone around him their lives

    Richiev Singularity

    A logline for a story like this can be a little tough, because, when you are creating a brand new world/setting there is a lot of information the reader needs to know to understand the setting. Here is an attempt that focuses more on the lead character and their goal: ----- "When his sister's to beRead more

    A logline for a story like this can be a little tough, because, when you are creating a brand new world/setting there is a lot of information the reader needs to know to understand the setting.

    Here is an attempt that focuses more on the lead character and their goal:

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    “When his sister’s to be executed, a thief must arise from the bottom floor of the skyscraper, which is the last refuge of humanity after a devastating plague, and reach the top floor in order save his sibling.”

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  3. Posted: November 6, 2019In:

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    Who are his people, Elves? (I only say that because your lead character seems to have lived hundreds of years like the elves of legend) Or are his people gypsies? Or are his people aliens? Since I don't know who his people are I will have to take a wild stab at it: "After meeting a girl who he belieRead more

    Who are his people, Elves? (I only say that because your lead character seems to have lived hundreds of years like the elves of legend)

    Or are his people gypsies?

    Or are his people aliens?

    Since I don’t know who his people are I will have to take a wild stab at it:

    “After meeting a girl who he believes is a long lost descendant of his people, an elf who can magically spread joy to others, desperately searches for his kin, lost ages ago.”

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