1. Posted: July 22, 2022In:

    THE INCREDIBLY, ALMOST MADE UP TRUE STORY OF THORTON T. THORTON The wealthy owner of a television network creates a show so offensive it results in a global backlash by America and its allies who will do anything to prevent the airing of the network’s lastest sitcom– which takes place in a Nazi concentration camp.

    Richiev Singularity

    You haven't told us what is standing in the way. Who is the face of the opposition.? Who is the face of those offended? If he owns the network, why does he care? You have only set up a situation. A man buys a network and creates offensive programming... How does this situation create dramatic tensioRead more

    You haven’t told us what is standing in the way.
    Who is the face of the opposition.?
    Who is the face of those offended?
    If he owns the network, why does he care?

    You have only set up a situation. A man buys a network and creates offensive programming…
    How does this situation create dramatic tension?
    If he owns the network he can do what he wants… unless (This specific thing stands in the way)

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  2. Posted: July 15, 2022In:

    A Japanese American young woman discovers deadly recordings of her parents who died unexpectedly.

    Richiev Singularity

    I am not sure what you mean by deadly recordings? In what way are the recordings deadly? Does the person who watches the recordings die? Or instead, do you mean that she discovers recordings of her parent's death, which is a completely different thing. "When she discovers recordings of the events leRead more

    I am not sure what you mean by deadly recordings? In what way are the recordings deadly? Does the person who watches the recordings die?

    Or instead, do you mean that she discovers recordings of her parent’s death, which is a completely different thing.

    “When she discovers recordings of the events leading to her parent’s death, a Japanese American must…” (Then tell us what the lead character must do)

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  3. Posted: July 19, 2022In:

    ‘It’s just one of those jobs you never get round to’ replies a man at a police station when he hands in a lost wallet after twenty years. A soccer referee rekindles her pursuit of diamonds stolen by her father when the wallet reappears. Attain her goal or surrender to gaol?

    Richiev Singularity

    A logline is a one-sentence summary of the plot. Your logline attempt is more of a scene than a plot. I would also avoid questions in a logline. "When her father's wallet reappears, a soccer referee rekindles her search for the diamonds he stole." You might also want to add something about who or whRead more

    A logline is a one-sentence summary of the plot.
    Your logline attempt is more of a scene than a plot.
    I would also avoid questions in a logline.

    “When her father’s wallet reappears, a soccer referee rekindles her search for the diamonds he stole.”

    You might also want to add something about who or what is standing in the way of the lead character’s goal.

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