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Revised (Round 2)- After a tragedy in London, Ohio, sends a dead soldier to the Veil World of the Supernatural, The soldier must stop a werewolf from entering the veil and destroying reality and exposing the supernatural to world, provoking chaos and destruction.
About this re-write, It is still missing cause and effect; as in... Cause: When this event happens, Effect: The lead character must accomplish this.In your logline, you have written the cause as; the lead character is transported to the veil world.This leads to the effect, he must stop the werewolf.Read more
About this re-write, It is still missing cause and effect; as in… Cause: When this event happens, Effect: The lead character must accomplish this.
In your logline, you have written the cause as; the lead character is transported to the veil world.
This leads to the effect, he must stop the werewolf.
However one doesn’t actually cause the other, the lead character could be transported to the veil world and not try to stop the werewolf.
Why must The lead character, have to be the one to stop the werewolf? You haven’t personalized this logline. Why him?
Why not some other warrior? What event causes the lead character to get personally involved?
See lessRevised: Exes – A 25 year old unemployed woman asks her depressed ex-boyfriend from college for a urine sample in order to pass a drug test for a potential job at her Father’s sign shop. In doing this she wants to enable herself to move out of her Mother’s house and re-enter the dating scene.
"When her potential employer demands a urinalysis, a selfish woman, desperate to move from her mother's house, must complete 10 favors for a disgruntled ex-boyfriend in order to secure a clean sample."--------------------------Title: The Ten Favorsor if that is too obscureTitle: The Ten Labors?(I seRead more
“When her potential employer demands a urinalysis, a selfish woman, desperate to move from her mother’s house, must complete 10 favors for a disgruntled ex-boyfriend in order to secure a clean sample.”
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Title: The Ten Favors
or if that is too obscure
Title: The Ten Labors?
(I see this as a redemption story, the woman is selfish and was a terrible person. The angry Ex, in order to get even for all the hell she put him through when they were dating demands she do 10 Favors, however through it all she begins to see the person she was which causes her to become a better person by the end of the movie, and of course the two end up falling in love)
See lessRevised: Exes – A 25 year old unemployed woman asks her depressed ex-boyfriend from college for a urine sample in order to pass a drug test for a potential job at her Father’s sign shop. In doing this she wants to enable herself to move out of her Mother’s house and re-enter the dating scene.
So her goal is to re-enter the dating scene, but in order to do that she must move out of her mothers house, in order to do that she must get a job at her father's business, but in order to do that she must pass the urinalysis, but in order to do that she must ask her ex-boyfriend for a sample... OkRead more
So her goal is to re-enter the dating scene, but in order to do that she must move out of her mothers house, in order to do that she must get a job at her father’s business, but in order to do that she must pass the urinalysis, but in order to do that she must ask her ex-boyfriend for a sample… Okay, got it.
Okay, she gets the urine sample, passes the test, gets the job, moves out and then starts dating. The End.
Where is the conflict?
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