1. Posted: November 6, 2018In:

    Revised (Round 2)- After a tragedy in London, Ohio, sends a dead soldier to the Veil World of the Supernatural, The soldier must stop a werewolf from entering the veil and destroying reality and exposing the supernatural to world, provoking chaos and destruction.

    Richiev Singularity

    The first part of this logline confuses me.Did the Veiled World arrive? (Into our reality)Or was the relentless fighter transported to the veiled world?I can't tell from reading this logline.(*Edit* Thanks for the clarification in the new version)

    The first part of this logline confuses me.
    Did the Veiled World arrive? (Into our reality)
    Or was the relentless fighter transported to the veiled world?
    I can’t tell from reading this logline.

    (*Edit* Thanks for the clarification in the new version)

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  2. Posted: November 5, 2018In:

    A recovering corneal transplant patient returns home only to experience a terrifying chain of events forcing her to determine their paranormal origins before it’s too late.

    Richiev Singularity

    "When she begins to see the paranormal, a corneal transplant patient must discover who was the transplant donor and why, since the operation, she is under supernatural threat."--------------------------------------------------I think this a solid concept, an eye transplant leads to seeing what shoulRead more

    “When she begins to see the paranormal, a corneal transplant patient must discover who was the transplant donor and why, since the operation, she is under supernatural threat.”
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    I think this a solid concept, an eye transplant leads to seeing what should never be?seen.

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  3. Posted: November 5, 2018In:

    A strong teenage girl begins training at a unique academy to fight the Gods who are trying to kill her family and her.

    Richiev Singularity

    You should give us an event that takes place sooner than 'eons ago'What prompts this girl, at this time, to fight the gods?You should put her at risk. Make it so her life or the life of someone she loves is in imminent?danger.

    You should give us an event that takes place sooner than ‘eons ago’
    What prompts this girl, at this time, to fight the gods?

    You should put her at risk. Make it so her life or the life of someone she loves is in imminent?danger.

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