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When the bus of an addicted fantasy gamer stops at a Utopian town, he will do anything to remain there, whilst resisting the unusual secret to their perfect lifestyle.
Maybe if the bus broke down at a medieval?fair, then we could understand why fantasy gamers, (Dungeons and Dragon fanatics?) might want to stay there.
Maybe if the bus broke down at a medieval?fair, then we could understand why fantasy gamers, (Dungeons and Dragon fanatics?) might want to stay there.
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One more thing: There are two reasons to ask a question...1: To get an answer, but the reader doesn't know the answer.2: Because it is rhetorical, But rhetorical assumes the answer is obvious but since the reader doesn't know what the cost is, it isn't rhetorical either.As a result, asking a questioRead more
One more thing: There are two reasons to ask a question…
1: To get an answer, but the reader doesn’t know the answer.
2: Because it is rhetorical, But rhetorical assumes the answer is obvious but since the reader doesn’t know what the cost is, it isn’t rhetorical either.
As a result, asking a question that is neither rhetorical or nor something the reader can answer adds no information to the logline and is just confusing.
I would try to write a version of this logline without the tagged on question?at the end, and add the stakes into the logline so the reader knows what the possible cost could be if the lead character messes with the timeline.
See lessAfter his wife is murdered a brilliant scientist travels back in time to save her- but at what cost?
At what cost? That would be the stakes and should be in the logline to hook the reader.
At what cost? That would be the stakes and should be in the logline to hook the reader.
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