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A married woman, riddled with guilt, starts over in a tiny village, but making it her home gets even tougher when she discovers she’s falling for the vicar.
Okay, it sounds as if the story begins with your lead falling in love with the vicar. You should begin your logline with that. You don't even have to get fancy, just say it flat out. "When she falls in love with the Vicar..." also, if you tell us she is riddled with guilt, you should tell us what shRead more
Okay, it sounds as if the story begins with your lead falling in love with the vicar. You should begin your logline with that. You don’t even have to get fancy, just say it flat out. “When she falls in love with the Vicar…”
also, if you tell us she is riddled with guilt, you should tell us what she is riddled with guilt over, “Riddled with guilt over the accidental death of her son” for instance.
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I have to agree with dpg. It's never good when a logline has to be deciphered. Who is the main character? What do they want? What sets the story in motion? And, Who or what is standing in their way?
I have to agree with dpg. It’s never good when a logline has to be deciphered.
Who is the main character?
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What sets the story in motion? And,
Who or what is standing in their way?
Touched by his family’s grief, a deceased, self-centred college graduate has three days until his funeral to show his family how much they mean to him too so he can have peace in the afterlife.
"Touched by his families grief, a teen who was self-absorbed while alive is given three days to show his family what they meant to him so he can have peace in the afterlife."
“Touched by his families grief, a teen who was self-absorbed while alive is given three days to show his family what they meant to him so he can have peace in the afterlife.”
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