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After being arrested for having dangerous future technology, the prison unleashes a hyper aggressive android, loyal to him, upon the police station in an attempt to escape.
Your lead character sounds more like the bad guy than the good guy
Your lead character sounds more like the bad guy than the good guy
See lessWhen an archaeologist is killed by a god, a student in mythology finds out and goes on the journey to find the weapon that can kill gods, a grotesque monster made back by a medieval monastery father.
Also, is there any reason the archaeologist is killed by "a god" Instead, you should have him killed by ''Zeus' or 'Aries', something the reader can picture in their minds. You say the lead character is a mythology student, that would imply we are talking about a mythological god, so you should nameRead more
Also, is there any reason the archaeologist is killed by “a god”
Instead, you should have him killed by ”Zeus’ or ‘Aries’, something the reader can picture in their minds.
You say the lead character is a mythology student, that would imply we are talking about a mythological god, so you should name the god for clarity to help the reader.
See lessWhen an archaeologist is killed by a god, a student in mythology finds out and goes on the journey to find the weapon that can kill gods, a grotesque monster made back by a medieval monastery father.
There is a disconnect?between the inciting incident and your lead character. Usually, the inciting incident happens to the lead character or to somebody they love. This is what spurs the character into action. such as:? "When his archaeologist father is killed by a god, a mythology student must..."Read more
There is a disconnect?between the inciting incident and your lead character.
Usually, the inciting incident happens to the lead character or to somebody they love. This is what spurs the character into action.
such as:? “When his archaeologist father is killed by a god, a mythology student must…”
You should make this personal
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