1. Posted: March 15, 2018In:

    When the world?s greatest and most hated superhero is forced into retirement after yet another fuck up, he searches for his successor via a reality television show where each week contestants battle against villains and each other to prove they can become the next Universal Hero.

    Richiev Singularity

    This should probably be told from the point of view of one of the contestants who is vying for the position of next great?Super Hero.

    This should probably be told from the point of view of one of the contestants who is vying for the position of next great?Super Hero.

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  2. Posted: March 14, 2018In:

    A private investigator who tracks people by dowsing must protect the man a vicious client hires him to find, as they may hold a clue to the origin of his abilities.

    Richiev Singularity

    Also, who is does the 'man' need protecting from?

    Also, who is does the ‘man’ need protecting from?

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  3. Posted: March 14, 2018In:

    A private investigator who tracks people by dowsing must protect the man a vicious client hires him to find, as they may hold a clue to the origin of his abilities.

    Richiev Singularity

    My question; is the story about the private investigator protecting the 'man' or is it about him finding the 'man'? One of those two elements should be dropped from the logline because it is adding to the confusion.

    My question; is the story about the private investigator protecting the ‘man’ or is it about him finding the ‘man’?
    One of those two elements should be dropped from the logline because it is adding to the confusion.

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