1. Posted: February 21, 2018In:

    When a paranoid new king starts burning women at the stake, a mysterious outsider must embrace both her destiny and the ancient Hermetic ways to change the course of history.

    Richiev Singularity

    I have to agree with Paul Clarke. I think he nails it. And the good thing is, we are only talking about a few changes. A specific inciting incident that affects the lead character personally. A specific description of the lead character, and a specific goal that the lead must accomplish. Right now tRead more

    I have to agree with Paul Clarke. I think he nails it.

    And the good thing is, we are only talking about a few changes. A specific inciting incident that affects the lead character personally. A specific description of the lead character, and a specific goal that the lead must accomplish. Right now this is all hinted at but a little vague and adding those specific details will help improve your logline.

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  2. Posted: February 19, 2018In:

    After an ex-girlfriend demands a sperm sample in exchange for giving back a rare vintage guitar, a once-famous rock star and his landlord?s daughter come up with a plan to get the guitar back without giving in to his ex?s demand while, also, dealing with their growing attraction to each other.

    Richiev Singularity

    I guess the most obvious question is, why not just give her the sperm sample?

    I guess the most obvious question is, why not just give her the sperm sample?

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  3. Posted: February 19, 2018In:

    Owner and his telepathically connected dog, impress every one they meet, and take the show on the road to financial independence.

    Richiev Singularity

    I seem to be saying this a lot... Your logline needs conflict

    I seem to be saying this a lot… Your logline needs conflict

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