1. Posted: February 9, 2018In:

    A young doctor tries an untested vaccine to save her brother’s life which results in a virus that destroys the world as we know it. She now has to lead a group of young survivors to safety. Trying to avoid a world of infected people and scavengers, while being hunted by something they’ve never seen before.

    Richiev Singularity

    Unless the person is famous don't use names in the logline. You should tell us why she is reluctant, I mean she is a doctor, who are usually people who care for those in need, so that kinda throws us off without a quick explanation. What is her worst nightmare? The plague? Some sort of monster?? HerRead more

    Unless the person is famous don’t use names in the logline.

    You should tell us why she is reluctant, I mean she is a doctor, who are usually people who care for those in need, so that kinda throws us off without a quick explanation.

    What is her worst nightmare? The plague? Some sort of monster?? Her ex-husband? You should?be specific so we can understand the stakes

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  2. Posted: February 8, 2018In:

    A well-known psychiatrist in a small town encounters with the mental status of different patients wanting to become professional writers, but he realizes that his advice to them won’t work.

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    What is the goal of the lead character?(I just re-read this. Does the lead character want to become a professional writer? Or does his patients? The first time I read the logline it seemed as if the patients wanted to become professional writers but now I am not so sure that is what you meant)

    What is the goal of the lead character?

    (I just re-read this. Does the lead character want to become a professional writer? Or does his patients? The first time I read the logline it seemed as if the patients wanted to become professional writers but now I am not so sure that is what you meant)

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  3. Posted: February 8, 2018In:

    During a civil war, an arrogant music teacher must lead her chaotic children’s choir to safety through music and games.

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    Wording is everything. Instead of leading the children to safety through music and games You should write? she leads the children to safety through a war zone Or something to that effect. That way you give the reader some stakes.

    Wording is everything.
    Instead of leading the children to safety through music and games
    You should write? she leads the children to safety through a war zone
    Or something to that effect.
    That way you give the reader some stakes.

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