1. Posted: December 28, 2017In:

    possible rom-com

    Richiev Singularity

    As written, the woman in your story seems to have the goal, the lead character seems to be swept up into her story. That can work, but only if the lead has a compelling goal as well.

    As written, the woman in your story seems to have the goal, the lead character seems to be swept up into her story.
    That can work, but only if the lead has a compelling goal as well.

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  2. Posted: December 28, 2017In:

    possible rom-com title “sunburn”

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    Richiev Singularity

    You haven't given us any clear conflict, adding that to the logline will help improve it.

    You haven’t given us any clear conflict, adding that to the logline will help improve it.

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  3. Posted: December 27, 2017In:

    to live a little longer

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    Richiev Singularity

    When he is captured by cannibals, a lost food critic has one month to teach the tribe the joy's of vegetarianism, or be the main course at the summer solstice.

    When he is captured by cannibals, a lost food critic has one month to teach the tribe the joy’s of vegetarianism, or be the main course at the summer solstice.

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