1. Posted: May 26, 2017In:

    An agoraphobic writer must revisit her dark past, and battle a menacing presence, in order to survive the night, and reach the most important deadline of her life.

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    Richiev Singularity

    "An agoraphobic writer must revisit her dark past (As a witch? give us a detail) to come up with the clues in her childhood mansion, to defeat the Demon that has haunted her since her youth"

    “An agoraphobic writer must revisit her dark past (As a witch? give us a detail) to come up with the clues in her childhood mansion, to defeat the Demon that has haunted her since her youth”

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  2. Posted: May 24, 2017In:

    A suspended detective confronts his long-buried past investigating an unsolved murder that forces him to face himself, to his end or a cathartic answer for the murder girl and himself.

    Richiev Singularity

    While the suspension sounds like an inciting incident. It does not really correlate to the goal of the unsolved case. What event happens that causes the lead character to re-open the long dead case?

    While the suspension sounds like an inciting incident. It does not really correlate to the goal of the unsolved case.

    What event happens that causes the lead character to re-open the long dead case?

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  3. Posted: May 23, 2017In:

    Inspired by actual events, a Chicago man from a tough Chicago neighbor joins the Armed Forces, landing on D-Day +5, surviving the savagery of the Battle of Bastogne and guarding one of the Nazi’s Luftwaffe Commander, Herman Goering at Nuremburg.

    Richiev Singularity

    You don't need to say he is a Chicago man from a tough Chicago neighborhood because it is redundant. just say he is from a tough Chicago neighborhood. (And we will know he is from Chicago)

    You don’t need to say he is a Chicago man from a tough Chicago neighborhood because it is redundant.

    just say he is from a tough Chicago neighborhood. (And we will know he is from Chicago)

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