1. Posted: February 13, 2017In:

    Locked in a secure decontamination unit, the amnesiac survivor of a mysterious spaceship crash must prove that she isn’t the alien doppelganger responsible.

    Richiev Singularity

    Here is an attempt at a logline, however I am not clear on the stakes (As noted above by Nir) so it is the best I could do: ----- "When she is accused of being an alien doppelganger, an amnesiac locked in a decontamination unit prove her humanity while going over the details of her spaceships voyageRead more

    Here is an attempt at a logline, however I am not clear on the stakes (As noted above by Nir) so it is the best I could do:
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    “When she is accused of being an alien doppelganger, an amnesiac locked in a decontamination unit prove her humanity while going over the details of her spaceships voyage and ultimate crash.”

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  2. Posted: February 13, 2017In:

    An unemployed mother works hard to get an honorable job as a zookeeper, but then finds herself at the center of an ethical conflict between a zoo and an unorthodox shelter for wildlife.

    Richiev Singularity

    I would drop the first part of the logline because as written you have two inciting incidents.The first inciting incident is getting the job, the second inciting incident is discovering she is the center of an ethical conflict Since the ethical conflict seems to be the story, begin the logline thereRead more

    I would drop the first part of the logline because as written you have two inciting incidents.

    The first inciting incident is getting the job, the second inciting incident is discovering she is the center of an ethical conflict
    Since the ethical conflict seems to be the story, begin the logline there not how she got the job.

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  3. Posted: February 14, 2017In:

    Two friend’s relationship turns hostile after one of them reveals their love for the other.

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    Richiev Singularity

    If this is a story about two guys who are friends and one declares his love; but the other is straight, it should be made clear in the logline because that is the hook. If this is a story about a boy and a girl who are friends and one declares his or her love, then the logline needs a hook, it needsRead more

    If this is a story about two guys who are friends and one declares his love; but the other is straight, it should be made clear in the logline because that is the hook.

    If this is a story about a boy and a girl who are friends and one declares his or her love, then the logline needs a hook, it needs that one extra thing to reel the reader in.

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