1. Posted: February 3, 2017In:

    With the raging fire from her grisly past illuminating and burning everything she has worked hard for, the troubled young girl embarks on a difficult journey to find healing and closure.

    Richiev Singularity

    Not sure what this logline means. You should give us a specific event in the logline and a specific goal.

    Not sure what this logline means.

    You should give us a specific event in the logline and a specific goal.

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  2. Posted: February 1, 2017In:

    A victim of inner turmoil, twenty-year-old Stephanie disastrously endeavors to reclaim her joy and happiness.

    Richiev Singularity

    You should define 'happiness' in the context of the story. Is happiness getting "Mr. Right", is it being hired at her dream job? Is it finishing her great American Novel? Because, as written it is hard to tell what the story is about. So add a few specifics and your logline will greatly improve.

    You should define ‘happiness’ in the context of the story. Is happiness getting “Mr. Right”, is it being hired at her dream job? Is it finishing her great American Novel?

    Because, as written it is hard to tell what the story is about.

    So add a few specifics and your logline will greatly improve.

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  3. Posted: February 2, 2017In:

    When a DiD sufferer takes an experimental drug for his condition, his alternate personality, who perceives reality differently, begins to takeover and goes on a quest to free humanity from hidden beings controlling reality while his alternate persona believes he’s actually on a murderous rampage.

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    Richiev Singularity

    Here is an attempt: ----- "After he's treated with an experimental drug for his DiD, a man will multiple personalities begins killing sinister?beings he discovers are secretly controlling the universe, but must fight his alternative personality who claims he is killing innocent people."

    Here is an attempt:
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    “After he’s treated with an experimental drug for his DiD, a man will multiple personalities begins killing sinister?beings he discovers are secretly controlling the universe, but must fight his alternative personality who claims he is killing innocent people.”

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