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Clumsy kid learns to dance to stand up to bully and impress bully’s ex-girlfriend at school dance.
In the movie 'ANGUS' the mean kids, as a joke, rig an election so that Angus will have to dance with the prettiest girl in school (The girl he has a crush on) in front of everyone. He is scared because he doesn't know how to dance. So in this scenario learning to dance and 'getting the girl' sort ofRead more
In the movie ‘ANGUS’ the mean kids, as a joke, rig an election so that Angus will have to dance with the prettiest girl in school (The girl he has a crush on) in front of everyone. He is scared because he doesn’t know how to dance. So in this scenario learning to dance and ‘getting the girl’ sort of go hand in hand.
I believe you are trying to say the same thing. The lead character must lean to dance, get the girl.
I would simply try another logline attempt that’s more clear. Maybe add a few specifics.
Good luck, your story sounds interesting
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There is a likability problem with your lead character. Why would we be interested in a woman who would even think about choosing between her children and a love interest.
There is a likability problem with your lead character. Why would we be interested in a woman who would even think about choosing between her children and a love interest.
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You might want to replace the word pert, with petite for clarity.
You might want to replace the word pert, with petite for clarity.
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