1. Posted: January 13, 2016In:

    [Note: This logline is for a TV comedy pilot] “After being charged with a DUI, a jaded, irreverent young man is thrown into the arms of a caring and venerable community service program to help those struggling with their own broken lives.” Thoughts and suggestions are hugely appreciated,

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    Possible title Help!

    Possible title

    Help!

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  2. Posted: January 15, 2016In:

    Suffering from hallucinations and sleep paralysis, an American exchange student studying abroad in Tokyo discovers that he has become host to a fox spirit responsible for a series of attacks that vary from mischief to malice.

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    Saying the lead is an American exchange student, and then saying he is studying abroad, is redundant. ----- When an American exchange student in Tokyo discovers he's become host to a fox spirit, he must... (Then tell us what he must do)

    Saying the lead is an American exchange student, and then saying he is studying abroad, is redundant.
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    When an American exchange student in Tokyo discovers he’s become host to a fox spirit, he must… (Then tell us what he must do)

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  3. Posted: January 16, 2016In:

    When two wealthy teenage brothers move into a small town, one of them tries to seduce a local girl. While the girl’s brother, after witnessing their strange behaviors such as acute sensitivity to sunlight and religious icons, lists the help of his friends to prove that the two brothers are Vampires in disguise.

    Richiev Singularity

    You should write the logline from the point of view of the lead character. Your logline switches perspective.

    You should write the logline from the point of view of the lead character. Your logline switches perspective.

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