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An emotional comedy about a dying playboy in his 30s, planning to host his own funeral, who falls in love for the first time, with an engaged woman.
"Upon falling in love for the first time, A dying playboy planning his own funeral must decide whether to pursue the futile love, or let her go."
“Upon falling in love for the first time, A dying playboy planning his own funeral must decide whether to pursue the futile love, or let her go.”
See less"A young?credulous technology student who needs money fast agrees to take care of a blind old man, but the job is not at all what the student anticipated, when the retired bank robber asks for help with his last heist to avenge the arch rival who made him blind"
1: Since you say student you don't need to say young. 2: 'credulous' is an odd word, you should use 'gullible' or 'naive', which mean the same thing and are more well known 3: "who needs money fast..." :: This is a good idea but should be used in the character description. A down and out technologyRead more
1: Since you say student you don’t need to say young.
2: ‘credulous’ is an odd word, you should use ‘gullible’ or ‘naive’, which mean the same thing and are more well known
3: “who needs money fast…” :: This is a good idea but should be used in the character description. A down and out technology student, or, A broke technology student.
4: “agrees to take care of a blind old man” :: This isn’t needed and should be dropped. (It gives you a false inciting incident and confuses the logline)
5: “but the job is not at all what the student anticipated,” :: Extra words, not needed in the logline.
6: “when the retired bank robber asks for help with his last heist to avenge the arch rival who made him blind” :: This is the meat of the logline and you buried it at the end.
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“When a retired blind bank robber asks him for help, a broke technology student uses his skills to help the old man get revenge on his arch rival; for the price of paying his tuition though college.”
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Hope that helped, good luck with this!
See less"A young?credulous technology student who needs money fast agrees to take care of a blind old man, but the job is not at all what the student anticipated, when the retired bank robber asks for help with his last heist to avenge the arch rival who made him blind"
1: Since you say student you don't need to say young. 2: 'credulous' is an odd word, you should use 'gullible' or 'naive', which mean the same thing and are more well known 3: "who needs money fast..." :: This is a good idea but should be used in the character description. A down and out technologyRead more
1: Since you say student you don’t need to say young.
2: ‘credulous’ is an odd word, you should use ‘gullible’ or ‘naive’, which mean the same thing and are more well known
3: “who needs money fast…” :: This is a good idea but should be used in the character description. A down and out technology student, or, A broke technology student.
4: “agrees to take care of a blind old man” :: This isn’t needed and should be dropped. (It gives you a false inciting incident and confuses the logline)
5: “but the job is not at all what the student anticipated,” :: Extra words, not needed in the logline.
6: “when the retired bank robber asks for help with his last heist to avenge the arch rival who made him blind” :: This is the meat of the logline and you buried it at the end.
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“When a retired blind bank robber asks him for help, a broke technology student uses his skills to help the old man get revenge on his arch rival; for the price of paying his tuition though college.”
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Hope that helped, good luck with this!
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