1. Posted: May 24, 2015In:

    A lonely middle aged autistic man's painful journey to spread wings and not slip into a made up fantasy world – after beloved parents violently die in a car accident of his doing.

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    The stakes are "slipping into an fantasy world' or in ohter words "loosing quality of life". jkcantwell suggestion does make a whole lotta sense, but almost every logline I (with the help of this forum) have now starts with "after" or "when" and although it works real well, it's starting to be annoyRead more

    The stakes are “slipping into an fantasy world’ or in ohter words “loosing quality of life”. jkcantwell suggestion does make a whole lotta sense, but almost every logline I (with the help of this forum) have now starts with “after” or “when” and although it works real well, it’s starting to be annoying.

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  2. Posted: May 24, 2015In:

    After an undercover hammerhead shark agent and his white shark crime boss bump their heads against a Japanese wale ship, the hammerhead thinks he?s a dolphin and starts giving dolphin therapy to his traumatised boss, who ? after witnessing the whale slaughter ? doesn?t want to kill big fish anymore.

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    OK, thank -I'm going to work on that!

    OK, thank -I’m going to work on that!

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  3. Posted: May 24, 2015In:

    A lonely middle aged autistic man's painful journey to spread wings and not slip into a made up fantasy world – after beloved parents violently die in a car accident of his doing.

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    Thanks, I'm not good in using -comma's- and -dashes- in any language. And spreading wings is vague. I myself was thinking stay in touch with reality?, but that phrase was too long.

    Thanks, I’m not good in using -comma’s- and -dashes- in any language. And spreading wings is vague. I myself was thinking stay in touch with reality?, but that phrase was too long.

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