Have an account? Sign In Now
Lost your password? Please enter your email address. You will receive a link and will create a new password via email.
Please briefly explain why you feel this question should be reported.
Please briefly explain why you feel this answer should be reported.
Please briefly explain why you feel this user should be reported.
A young American executive with strong family bonds seeks revenge for her sister's murder only to be confronted with the realization that the American Revolution never ended and her family secretly fights for the British side.
Hmm yes, nice logline. Most of us have strong family bonds so: But there is now clear link between the "sister" and "her family". So we can only 'presume' that she has been killed by her own family.So for me there are two themes now in this story. As always I'm stretching my mind here!! I know you wRead more
Hmm yes, nice logline. Most of us have strong family bonds so:
But there is now clear link between the “sister” and “her family”. So we can only ‘presume’ that she has been killed by her own family.So for me there are two themes now in this story. As always I’m stretching my mind here!! I know you wanted to create suspense but you only created confusion.
To clear things up:
“When a young American executive finds out the British part of her family killed her American sister in the never ending ‘aftermath’ of the American Revolution, she seeks revenge.”
For me this is “A few centimeters below” meets “Sleepy Hollow”.
See less?After being tricked into an symbiotic relationship with a brilliant but evil alien wanting to take over Earth, a clumsy neurosurgeon must quickly choose between operating himself or be operated by the perverted exercise of power.
The alien is slowly taking more control. The clumsy neurosurgeon can now take a gamble and literally choose to operate his own brain to get rid of the symbian, 'killing' his chances of fame and/or himself but if the operation is successful - saving his soul. Thanks for reacting and will get rid of rRead more
The alien is slowly taking more control. The clumsy neurosurgeon can now take a gamble and literally choose to operate his own brain to get rid of the symbian, ‘killing’ his chances of fame and/or himself but if the operation is successful – saving his soul. Thanks for reacting and will get rid of references.
“This also reads a bit like a setting” Now you say, any suggestions on reforming/revising?
See lessTwo farmers in Iceland are framed by the Sheriff and sent to Denmark to slave in chains for the rest of their life. The younger one returns after 20 years to realize he has a son and wants revenge.
A minor. The logline doesn't tell he escaped; the first thing I would ask myself is "how? can someone who is imprisoned 'for live' (in the old days) return back home. And does the logline without any doubt tell us 'where' he returns without using the word "home". 'After being forced to watch his lovRead more
A minor. The logline doesn’t tell he escaped; the first thing I would ask myself is “how? can someone who is imprisoned ‘for live’ (in the old days) return back home.
And does the logline without any doubt tell us ‘where’ he returns without using the word “home”.
‘After being forced to watch his lover?s execution and( then) sentenced for life in prison for a crime he didn?t commit,, a farmer in 16th century Iceland escapes and returns home to avenge her death and exonerate his name.”
Maybe there is a shorter way to say “sentenced for life in prison”? Don’t know…
See less