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Twin sister detectives – who moonlight as vigilante serial killers – get framed for murder by their criminology teacher, who they (now) must outwit to clear their names.
Yes it MUST have SIN CITY FEEL. it's about TWIN CITY meets SIN CITY. Furthermore, as I explained earlier, the twins are not evil by nature, it's not in their genes. They only kill to do justice. But they still kill (although one of the twins is not really in to it=see drawing of father working in thRead more
Yes it MUST have SIN CITY FEEL. it’s about TWIN CITY meets SIN CITY. Furthermore, as I explained earlier, the twins are not evil by nature, it’s not in their genes. They only kill to do justice. But they still kill (although one of the twins is not really in to it=see drawing of father working in the dog meat factory and the girls watching) a lot, therefore being serial killer. If I would make them totally evil the audience would not ‘root’ for them anymore. It’s what Tarantino does with making his protags likable and not likable at the same time, play with this feeling, that makes the audience feel unconvertible and keeps them focused.
That’s it for now. I go and take a look at your comments again this evening, midday for you guys in Amerika (?), and for now let the info sink in. You both are far ‘out thinking’ (if that’s a word) me in terms of sentence contruction, but hey, that’s why I’m here, hopefully learning on this forum
See less?After a car accident leaves him in a coma, a lazy Amish logline writer finds himself trapped in an elevator with Hell?s best producer. He now has six floors to pitch and sell an idea to save his physical body and awake.?
Thanks guys, I like both your comments, and loglines. But I can't see the Devil abduct someone. In movies normally the Devil lets his/her/its victims screw themselves, while making a deal. I also wanted to make the writer lazy because this is one of the seven deadly sins (in writing) in. But I can iRead more
Thanks guys, I like both your comments, and loglines. But I can’t see the Devil abduct someone. In movies normally the Devil lets his/her/its victims screw themselves, while making a deal. I also wanted to make the writer lazy because this is one of the seven deadly sins (in writing) in. But I can imagine most people do not know this and/or it’s not relevant enough. I like the Devil -versus- devoted God loving man.
I’m wondering, could he be “a lazy Amish logline writer”. A soul eating contradictio in terminis.
“May work as a short film but not sure about it as a feature though.” I agree, that is why I called it an real time ultra- short. The movie (if ever made-haha) will be no more than a 45 seconds; the ride from touching the ‘go’ button (audience sees time ticking away). The total time should be about 25 seconds until the elevator would come to a halt. But it never will…
At the beginning of the story we see a night nurse with red eyes) laying her hand on the comatose patient saying: already having your seizures again, and again and again” cut to him finding himself in the elevator. When he does not come up with a good enough pitch/or he does, the Devil screws him anyway. at the end of the story the elevator will go down very fast. A SMASH CUT to the hospital room again.. completing the loop. And yes, I like the frase “eternal damnation” and that precisely what he gets.
The catch here is that the car crash is the start of his eternal elevator pitching, causal loop.
With ‘Amish’ added:
After a car crash leaves him in a coma, a lazy Amish logline writer finds himself trapped in an elevator with Hell?s best producer. He now has six floors to pitch the perfect logline if he?s to save his physical body and awake.?
HOW TO MAKE IT SHORTER and at the word ‘offer’?
After a car crash leaves him in a coma, a lazy Amish logline writer finds himself trapped in an elevator with Hell?s best producer, who offers him six floors to pitch the perfect logline if he?s to save his physical body and awake.?
Is it not all about the ‘Devil’s offer’. The writer being ‘Dead or alive in the logline’ does not matter if he must respond to the Devil’s offer. Him ‘NOT’ responding to the Devils offer, he’s ‘inactive’, but by luck can get out of his predicament. By being active, accepting the Devil’s offer – in my story – he will ‘actively choose’ his own fate; fire and brimstone.
See less?After a car accident leaves him in a coma, a lazy Amish logline writer finds himself trapped in an elevator with Hell?s best producer. He now has six floors to pitch and sell an idea to save his physical body and awake.?
Thanks guys, I like both your comments, and loglines. But I can't see the Devil abduct someone. In movies normally the Devil lets his/her/its victims screw themselves, while making a deal. I also wanted to make the writer lazy because this is one of the seven deadly sins (in writing) in. But I can iRead more
Thanks guys, I like both your comments, and loglines. But I can’t see the Devil abduct someone. In movies normally the Devil lets his/her/its victims screw themselves, while making a deal. I also wanted to make the writer lazy because this is one of the seven deadly sins (in writing) in. But I can imagine most people do not know this and/or it’s not relevant enough. I like the Devil -versus- devoted God loving man.
I’m wondering, could he be “a lazy Amish logline writer”. A soul eating contradictio in terminis.
“May work as a short film but not sure about it as a feature though.” I agree, that is why I called it an real time ultra- short. The movie (if ever made-haha) will be no more than a 45 seconds; the ride from touching the ‘go’ button (audience sees time ticking away). The total time should be about 25 seconds until the elevator would come to a halt. But it never will…
At the beginning of the story we see a night nurse with red eyes) laying her hand on the comatose patient saying: already having your seizures again, and again and again” cut to him finding himself in the elevator. When he does not come up with a good enough pitch/or he does, the Devil screws him anyway. at the end of the story the elevator will go down very fast. A SMASH CUT to the hospital room again.. completing the loop. And yes, I like the frase “eternal damnation” and that precisely what he gets.
The catch here is that the car crash is the start of his eternal elevator pitching, causal loop.
With ‘Amish’ added:
After a car crash leaves him in a coma, a lazy Amish logline writer finds himself trapped in an elevator with Hell?s best producer. He now has six floors to pitch the perfect logline if he?s to save his physical body and awake.?
HOW TO MAKE IT SHORTER and at the word ‘offer’?
After a car crash leaves him in a coma, a lazy Amish logline writer finds himself trapped in an elevator with Hell?s best producer, who offers him six floors to pitch the perfect logline if he?s to save his physical body and awake.?
Is it not all about the ‘Devil’s offer’. The writer being ‘Dead or alive in the logline’ does not matter if he must respond to the Devil’s offer. Him ‘NOT’ responding to the Devils offer, he’s ‘inactive’, but by luck can get out of his predicament. By being active, accepting the Devil’s offer – in my story – he will ‘actively choose’ his own fate; fire and brimstone.
See less