1. Posted: June 16, 2020In:

    When charismatic Russian politician Boris Nemtsov, is brutally murdered in Moscow, the American documentary filmmaker, is propelled on a dangerous search for the truth. Along the way she faces the toughest choice of her life – to betray Boris and herself by extorting the truth or go to the end no matter what.

    savinh0 Samurai

    Richiev wrote a good version. I agree that you should focus your "documentary" on the "disover the truth" part as your main goal, because your first version suggests "betraying Boris" which doesn't make sense for me, as the "truth" about Boris Nemzow's murder was never brought to light. I watched soRead more

    Richiev wrote a good version.

    I agree that you should focus your “documentary” on the “disover the truth” part as your main goal, because your first version suggests “betraying Boris” which doesn’t make sense for me, as the “truth” about Boris Nemzow’s murder was never brought to light. I watched some documentaries about Nemzow and also read books about Russian politics and himself, and there are many theories out there as to whom is behind his murder. So, again, focus on the finding the truth part is my suggestion.

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  2. Posted: June 13, 2020In:

    When a white supremacist cop is confronted by billboards calling out his chief’s neglect of a rape and murder case, he must silence the victim’s bitter mother and return peace to the town.

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    savinh0 Samurai

    Good version, Karel! I was just wondering if the logline wasn't told from the perspective of the mother (Frances McDormand)? I thought she was the protagonist.  

    Good version, Karel! I was just wondering if the logline wasn’t told from the perspective of the mother (Frances McDormand)? I thought she was the protagonist.

     

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  3. Posted: June 13, 2020In:

    A sound effects man teams up with a cop has seven days to go after a murder suspect who killed a teenage girl who happens to be his daughter.

    savinh0 Samurai

    This is basically Taken with two protagonists teaming up to get the murder of a daughter.What does the profession "sound effecte" have to do with your story? Does it play a role in getting the suspect murder? I don't see a connection here. Why does he have seven days? What's happening after the seveRead more

    This is basically Taken with two protagonists teaming up to get the murder of a daughter.

    • What does the profession “sound effecte” have to do with your story? Does it play a role in getting the suspect murder? I don’t see a connection here.

     

    • Why does he have seven days? What’s happening after the seven days? The time restriction is not clear to me without a description.

     

    • You say he is a “murder suspect”, but after you write “who killed a teenage girl”. So is he a suspect or is he the real murder? That’s important to understand.

    I like the title of your logline. Sounds very exciting!

     

     

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