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The great British icon suffers the slings and arrows of outrageous farce when an illiterate English twit, Will, and a black fry cook, Shakespeare, team up to become the world?s single greatest playwright.
I think you should forget the fact that it IS a send-up or a farce, and concentrate on writing the logline as if it were a real story. Starting with "When..." "When an illiterate twit (Will) and an Elizabethan fry cook (Shakespeare) join forces to "get laid writing plays", they must fight the tyrannRead more
I think you should forget the fact that it IS a send-up or a farce, and concentrate on writing the logline as if it were a real story. Starting with “When…”
“When an illiterate twit (Will) and an Elizabethan fry cook (Shakespeare) join forces to “get laid writing plays”, they must fight the tyrannical monarchy or risk getting “Barred from Avon”.
And in at 30 words…
See lessAn elite member of the galactic Special Forces is wrongly convicted for a crime committed by a congressman?s son. He must prove his innocence, and seek his revenge, while he serves his sentence at an experimental prison camp.
An elite member of the galactic Special Forces is wrongly convicted for a crime committed by a congressman?s son. He must prove his innocence, and seek his revenge, while he serves his sentence at an experimental prison camp The logline can be shortened into one sentence, to about 30 words or less.Read more
An elite member of the galactic Special Forces is wrongly convicted for a crime committed by a congressman?s son. He must prove his innocence, and seek his revenge, while he serves his sentence at an experimental prison camp
The logline can be shortened into one sentence, to about 30 words or less. Start it off with “As”, “Before”, “When”, or “After”, so the rest of the logline forces you to “answer the question”.
Regarding the different genre; I disagree with the other sentiments. Sure, you could make it current day, Earth, but then, the story is fairly common, cliche and hardly unique. Putting in the future, or in space (changing genres, changing locations, etc.) adds a different “dimension” (no pun intended), that makes for a more solid hook; something no one’s done before. Creating a “world” outside of this one is one way of making your story stand out. It can be done a number of ways, and one way is to really take it “out of this world”.
Just my thoughts…
Geno Scala (sharkeatingman), judge
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Your antagonist has to be someone specific. It shouldn't be something conceptual like "the government" or "the police", or, in this case, "emotions and fears" being his biggest rival. It's pretty inventive, but that is better suited as a tagline, than the logline. Geno Scala (sharkeatingman), judge
Your antagonist has to be someone specific. It shouldn’t be something conceptual like “the government” or “the police”, or, in this case, “emotions and fears” being his biggest rival. It’s pretty inventive, but that is better suited as a tagline, than the logline.
Geno Scala (sharkeatingman), judge
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