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When a stripper learns the exact date of her death from a mysterious patron, she seeks to tie up the loose ends and find meaning in her life.
What it lacks is a clear antagonist and a true conflict. I was immediately struck by the irony of a stripper- paid to untie her clothing to take them off- having to "tie up loose ends", so you may want to explore that possibility in future logline attempts. Irony provides instant conflict, and conflRead more
What it lacks is a clear antagonist and a true conflict. I was immediately struck by the irony of a stripper- paid to untie her clothing to take them off- having to “tie up loose ends”, so you may want to explore that possibility in future logline attempts. Irony provides instant conflict, and conflict drives every story. Good luck!
Geno Scala (sharkeatingman), judge…
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As Clipper announcer Ralph Lawler says, "Bingo! Three points for the big man!" I don't think rival necessarily implies basketball, at least that wasn't my impression. Perhaps "enemy" or "adversary" is better. Good job, nice work!
As Clipper announcer Ralph Lawler says, “Bingo! Three points for the big man!”
I don’t think rival necessarily implies basketball, at least that wasn’t my impression. Perhaps “enemy” or “adversary” is better.
Good job, nice work!
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Btw, that was Geno Scala (sharkeatingman), judge...
Btw, that was Geno Scala (sharkeatingman), judge…
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