Classics section notwithstanding, this logline is a bit off. You really shouldn’t mention a character unless it is pertinant to understanding the story-: “When Einstein develops the theory of relativity…”, “When Santa Claus discovers…”. Mentioning him four times is completely off the tracks.

The idea of the logline is to highlight the most important points (hooks) of the story. The fact that the boy character reminds him of another isn’t relative to the bigger picture. The bigger hooks are:

1) A boy who sees horrible images, but doesn’t know why or how
2) A child psychologist who treats him discovers that he is actually seeing dead people and doesn’t know it.
3) The child psychologist also happens to be dead himself and doesn’t know it.

Once you identify the major hooks in a story, the logline somewhat writes itself, save a noun or adjective or two.

Geno Scala (sharkeatingman)- judge

I love the concept, but if it’s a comedy, the logline has to be/should be/ strongly suggested to be/ funny. As it reads now, it’s a bit more serious sounding.

I would inject some irony here as well, playing off the terms “cold feet” or “jilted”, or even the shotgun wedding theme.

“After backing out of his wedding, a wimpy schoolteacher gets a lesson on love in Appalachia- taught to him by the bride’s family, from the end of double barrels.”