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After a road accident on the highway, a young man finds himself trapped in a strange, remote town where nothing ? and no one ? is as it seems.
Geno Scala- judge...
Geno Scala- judge…
See lessAfter a road accident on the highway, a young man finds himself trapped in a strange, remote town where nothing ? and no one ? is as it seems.
I understand about car trouble scenes being overused, but so are space scenes, mafia hits, etc. It's the movies- the original Home of the Cliche! You can still make an excellent story out of it. I think the logline is very good, and has promise. I would clarify a bit more about "not what it seems".Read more
I understand about car trouble scenes being overused, but so are space scenes, mafia hits, etc. It’s the movies- the original Home of the Cliche! You can still make an excellent story out of it.
I think the logline is very good, and has promise. I would clarify a bit more about “not what it seems”. No time to be coy in a logline- let it all hang out. Whatever is going on in the town is your “hook”, so don’t save it for the read. You might never get a read with this logline as it stands.
Good luck!
See lessA disparate and desperate group of people transcend their hopelessness and band together to find their voice, rediscovering, under the baton of their choirmaster, a dignity and purpose that their ravaged lives had threatened to destroy
I've read the other comments; I just think your talking in too much broad, flowery semantics instead of using plain language. Phrases like "transcends their hopelessness", and "finding their voice", and even "dignity and purpose that their ravaged lives threatened to destroy" don't really say anythiRead more
I’ve read the other comments; I just think your talking in too much broad, flowery semantics instead of using plain language. Phrases like “transcends their hopelessness”, and “finding their voice”, and even “dignity and purpose that their ravaged lives threatened to destroy” don’t really say anything. You need to be much more specific.
Lastly, never include two words so similar in sound and spelling such as “disparate” and “desparate”. It’s cute, but not appropriate in a logline. The idea is to get someone to WANT to read the script, not piss off the producer!
Conceptually, and genre- I cannot render an opinion, because neither one is clear to me, and thats the major problem. Hope this helps some!
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